Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/Battle of Delville Wood

Battle of Delville Wood
I have now completed writing this article - I started working on it after visiting Delville Wood in the summer. Submitted for peer review because I believe that it is no longer a "start class" article. Also, as part of the WWI drive I thought it needed a lot more information, particularly on the German forces involved (as do some other battles ofthe Somme). Farawayman (talk) 16:42, 6 October 2009 (UTC)

Redmarkviolinist
Looks quite good reading through it. This would make a great A-class article, possibly a Featured Article.


 * The Prose is well written, but if you could break it into a few different paragraphs that would be nice. ✅ Where feasable and appropriate.


 * Make sure you capitalize all the words in the titles that need it. ✅


 * Footnotes should go after punctuation marks.✅


 * Watch out for contractions.✅


 * Some of the pictures (mainly the ones in the middle of the article on the left) would be more helpful if they were expanded.✅


 * All your facts are well referenced.

Very well written! Cheers, Ṝ ed  M arkV iolinist Drop me a line 18:46, 6 October 2009 (UTC)

Abraham, B.S.
More MoS pointers than anything: Cheers, Abraham, B.S. (talk) 00:05, 7 October 2009 (UTC)
 * Dates should be delinked.✅
 * Headings should not begin with "The", and only the first word and proper nouns should be capitalised in headings.✅
 * Endashes are required between date ranges used in the prose, and page ranges used in citations. For example: "14 July - 15 September 1916" --> "14 July – 15 September 1916" ✅
 * Dashes used in the prose should be emdashes. For example: "The Allied objective was no longer to try to break the German Front in a sudden, surprise attack – as the depth of German defences had proven this to be impossible." --> "The Allied objective was no longer to try to break the German Front in a sudden, surprise attack&mdash;as the depth of German defences had proven this to be impossible." ✅
 * Images should not be aligned to the left directly under level three headings. For example, the images of the commanders under "The Plan" heading.✅

✅ and insertions by Farawayman (talk) 20:42, 7 October 2009 (UTC)

Anotherclown
Top effort. Only one (minor) point:
 * the images could have alt text added to them per WP:ALT ✅Farawayman (talk) 20:41, 10 October 2009 (UTC)

Cheers. Anotherclown (talk) 22:30, 9 October 2009 (UTC)

AustralianRupert
Hi, Farawayman. You have obviously spent a lot of time and effort on this. Well done. I have made a couple of edits, only minor and relating to spaces and dashes etc. I only have two points (only very minor):


 * I believe that you are accidentally using the endash incorrectly in some places where you should really be using a normal hyphen. The endash is for page ranges, date ranges and to indicate a relationship between places, values etc. So in the case of Major-General, it should just be a hyphen, not an endash. WP:DASH is the policy link. ✅....where I assumed the need applied to revert to hyphens. Farawayman (talk) 19:22, 12 October 2009 (UTC)
 * Map 5 is still missing alt text, although all the others have them. ✅Farawayman (talk) 19:17, 12 October 2009 (UTC)

Anyway, that is it. Great effort, by the way. I think that this could be an A class article. I have updated the assessment from Start to B, but it would need to go through the ACR to be rated an A (obviously). Cheers. — AustralianRupert (talk) 10:12, 11 October 2009 (UTC)