Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/Battle of Ghazni

Battle of Ghazni
I wrote this article from scratch. Fixed and edited it and have it cited and referenced. Just want to know what else can be done to improve this article?

Thanks Mercenary2k 07:02, 13 December 2006 (UTC)


 * Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, APR t 23:16, 15 December 2006 (UTC)

Kirill Lokshin
A good start, but still lots of improvement that can be done, I think; some general suggestions: More generally, any additional detail would be helpful; the article is still fairly brief, as such things go. Keep up the good work! Kirill Lokshin 07:27, 13 December 2006 (UTC)
 * More citations are needed, and (more importantly) to more reputable sources. BritishBattles.com really isn't an appropriate reference in the long run; the article needs to be sourced to published historical works (see WP:MILHIST).
 * The lead section should be a two/three-paragraph summary of the entire article.
 * The OOB would probably work better as a table; any additional information for it (commanders & strength of each unit, mainly) would be very helpful.
 * Any chance of getting some maps, both of the campaign and of the assault on the city itself?
 * Some more images might be possible; I would assume that there would be contemporary prints and such that would be PD-Art.

Alphageekpa
I'm going to agree with Kirill. Probably the single biggest area for improvement is increasing the number of citations, and using more traditional and reputable sources. Websites are fine for general and background information, but the key to taking this article to the next level is going to be incorporating published (print) resources. Great start, and keepin up the good work! Alphageekpa 11:35, 13 December 2006 (UTC)