Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/Black Army of Hungary

Black Army of Hungary
I'm listing the article since it has been improved (or maybe just expanded it depends on you) a lot during the past weeks. It also drew the attention of various users, which resulted in national point of view versus neutral POV issues. Though half of the references incorporate English texts, the rest of them is in Hungarian, thus it would be nice if editors familiar with the language also joined the work or expressed their thoughts. Any help is appreciated and I like to get more and constant attention from you, since the article had been tagged already when I started editing it. Lajbi  Holla @ me  12:53, 11 October 2010 (UTC)

Fifelfoo
There's a lot of work on citations before this is ready for MILHIST A class
 * fn1 Tanner, Marcus (2009-03-18). 404s.
 * fn2 appeard to have been authored by (R. N. B.)
 * fn3 TITLE IN ALL CAPS
 * Hungarian names in footnotes: Are you using Western or Hungarian Name Order?
 * fn4 Hunyadi Öcs. MK. (1996-1999). miscited, see the title page; what makes Rakoczi Foundation Heritage Series a reliable publisher.
 * fn5 Out of style (Kartográfiai Vállalat (Budapest, Hungary). )
 * For style: (in Italian) Redaelli, Alberto (1979)
 * Capitalisation: Wargames research Group
 * fn15 location of (in Hungarian), missing space in Budapest,Hungary
 * Iliescu, Octavian (2002). TITLE IN CAPS
 * Formatting for a dateless work: Beham, Markus Peter.
 * Fenyvesi, László (1990). location of (in Hungarian).
 * Generally translations of the article title would be nice for non-English titled works
 * Tóth Zoltán (1925) and Tóth Zoltán (1925) duplicated citation;
 * Tóth Zoltán (1925); What makes a work from this era dependable in terms of scholarship when it is dealing with national mythos?
 * Lynn White, jr. (1973). is almost certainly miscited, and that almost certainly isn't its real title
 * Kukorelly, Endre (2008). King M. (novel).  Novels are not reliable for historical fact.
 * Citation name orders are all over the joint
 * Neal Bedford; Janine Eberle (2007). Lonely Planet Vienna. is not reliable for medieval history
 * Kelényi, György; Farbaky Péter,Széphelyi F. György (2006). Commas or semicolons?
 * Dr. Thallóczy Lajos (1915) . Remove the title
 * Are you citing the entire kronológiája, or an alphabetically or chronologically ordered article from within it? If you're citing a separate entry in a Tertiary Source, you may as well indicate the entry, and the individual entry author if the entry is signed by the author.  Benda, Kálmán (editor) (1981) (in Hungarian). Magyarország történeti kronológiája I /A kezdetektől 1526-ig/. Budapest: Akadémiai Kiadó. p. 276. ISBN 963 05 2661 1. ; for an example, see Bartl, Július; Dusan Skvarna (2002). of how to cite an individual entry.
 * Date out of style, TITLE IN CAPS "CROATIA". England: Foundation for Medieval Genealogy. 02009-02-12February 12, 2009. http://fmg.ac/Projects/MedLands/CROATIA.htm.
 * Using a primary source (Antonio Bonfini (1995) [1568]) for facts is Original Research
 * Using a primary source (Thuróczy János (2001) [1488]) for facts is Original Research
 * Date required: Jan Długosz (in Latin). Historiae Polonicae liber XIII.et ultimus.
 * Caps in title, possible primary source (source reprint possible): Heltai, Gáspár (1981).
 * Caps in title, Tibor Szabó (2010-09-11).
 * Date out of style, what makes the Mayor (or any number of this minor government non-academic offices) reliable sources for the purposes of medieval history? "Vár története" (in Hungarian). Vadna, Hungary: Mayor's office of Vadna. 02008 2008. http://www.vadna.hu/main.php?pg=12&c=39.


 * The colour of the battle sequences are unreadable, some of the images are almost certainly copyvios OR original research. The Table of Contents is over spaced.  It doesn't appear as though the article relied upon a scholarly work for its structure or general discourse, but picked the eyes out of internet available sources.  I share a worry about nationalist popular sources being used.  OTOH, I'm fairly happy with the quality of academic work in Hungarian social sciences post 1963, and unworried with scholarly works in Hungarian from after that date.  Fifelfoo (talk) 02:40, 12 October 2010 (UTC)


 * I don't know the process and howabouts to place comments to a peer review, so I only note here that I replied in Talk:Black Army of Hungary/to do. Sorry if it's unofficial. Lajbi  Holla @ me  21:29, 13 October 2010 (UTC)

WikiCopter
Sorry, I would give more comments, but I'm getting tired. WikiCopter (radio &bull; sorties &bull;  images &bull;  shot down) 04:43, 13 October 2010 (UTC)
 * The link Soimos is a dab. DONE
 * I hope you get back soon after having a rest :)  Lajbi  Holla @ me  14:29, 13 October 2010 (UTC)
 * LOL. I'm back to comment. WikiCopter (radio &bull; sorties &bull;  images &bull;  shot down) 23:07, 14 October 2010 (UTC)


 * The lead looks awkward. For one thing, you could add  to the image syntax. WikiCopter (radio &bull;  sorties &bull;  images &bull;  shot down) 23:08, 14 October 2010 (UTC)
 * The article needs a lot of refs.
 * In the section 'Battles and respective captains of the Black Army', the table header 'Captains in charge' sounds kind of informal. WikiCopter (radio &bull; sorties &bull;  images &bull;  shot down) 23:11, 14 October 2010 (UTC)
 * In notes, Zemplen, Saros and Kassa are dabs. That's all I have for now. I'm getting itchy to get back to the South Dakota battleships. Face-wink.svg WikiCopter (radio &bull; sorties &bull;  images &bull;  shot down) 23:13, 14 October 2010 (UTC)