Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/Charles N. DeGlopper

Charles N. DeGlopper
Need help to determine the completeness of the article, some direction on refining it. Trevorbrooks 16:21, 15 June 2007 (UTC)

Oberiko

 * This article needs to cite its sources
 * Can you be more specific as to when he received the medal in the introduction? "Battle of Normandy" has different meanings to different people (see its talk page for details), be it the "Normandy Campaign", "Invasion of Normandy" or "Operation Overlord".
 * I'd remove the Google Map links within the article
 * Instead of a time line, I think a full section for "posthumous awards and honors" would be better able to contain the information beyond his death Oberiko 13:20, 16 June 2007 (UTC)

jwillbur

 * There is a lot of information in the Timeline section, it should be converted from a list to prose and worked into the rest of the article. That would give you enough text to create sections for his early life and legacy, for example.
 * In the "Medal of Honor action" section, the first 7 sentences or so don't deal directly with DeGlopper's regiment. It's good to have some background on the battle, but that level of detail is not necessary. It would be better to summarize that information in a few sentences and then focus on what DeGlopper himself experienced during the battle.
 * Use inline citations throughout the article.

jwillbur 21:50, 21 June 2007 (UTC)


 * These are exactly the types of suggestions I was looking for, thank you! I'll work on it as time allows.Trevorbrooks 21:45, 25 June 2007 (UTC)