Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/Citadel of Arbil

Citadel of Arbil
Complete rewrite of article that had been completely neglected so far. Want to get it to GA but at the moment especially the Modern period and Architecture sections are more a collection of facts than a well-written, flowing story, so comments are welcome. I pretty much exhausted the sources on the history of this place (unless I dig really, really deep), but I can find more on architecture and layout.Zoeperkoe (talk) 14:19, 16 July 2010 (UTC)

AustralianRupert
Sorry, I can't really comment on the content, but here are a few very general suggestions. Good work so far, by the way:
 * There is one disambig link that should be fixed according to the Featured article tools:
 * ✅--Zoeperkoe (talk) 05:11, 27 July 2010 (UTC)


 * alt text could be added to the images (instructions at WP:ALT), although it is not a requirement for GA, but certainly something that usually gets brought up at Milhist ACR;
 * ✅--although someone might check the alt captions, as I have no experience in writing them. Zoeperkoe (talk) 22:34, 27 July 2010 (UTC)


 * in the lead you have "fifth millennium" but then later you have "2nd millennium" in the Ur III section (these are slightly inconsistent styles that could be tweak to be the same);
 * ✅--Zoeperkoe (talk) 15:18, 27 July 2010 (UTC)


 * in the modern period section you have an abbreviation for metres here: "A 15 m high steel water..." but I think it would be best to spell it out in full as you do this elsewhere (e.g. in the Architecture and layout section);
 * ✅--Zoeperkoe (talk) 15:18, 27 July 2010 (UTC)


 * the values using metres etc. could have converts added to them for those unfamiliar with metres, this can be done by using the convert template;
 * ✅--Zoeperkoe (talk) 14:52, 27 July 2010 (UTC)


 * ISSNs could be added to the journals in the References section;
 * ✅--Zoeperkoe (talk) 05:07, 27 July 2010 (UTC)


 * an OCLC number could be added to the Naval Intelligence Division source (in this case the number is 1077604, which can be found by going to worldcat.org: ).
 * ✅--Zoeperkoe (talk) 05:07, 27 July 2010 (UTC)

AustralianRupert (talk) 05:40, 23 July 2010 (UTC)