Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/DFS 346

DFS 346
Need some help directing further development. Mothmolevna 18:22, 12 May 2007 (UTC)

cla68
Interesting article, here's a few suggestions:
 * Needs inline citations. I suggest having a citation at the end of each paragraph citing all the sources used for the information contained in that paragraph.
 * Add a sentence or two more to the intro so that it more completely summarizes the entire article.
 * The "Concept" section needs more background detail such as which country was involved and why. What's the historical context for the development of this machine?
 * Do you have more specific dates for its development during World War II?
 * The grammar needs to be worked on throughout the article. I suggest you ask a couple of editor's that you've worked with if they might could spare a few minutes to go over it for you.
 * I think you should list all your sources in the references section. You can look at the references section in B-17 Flying Fortress for an example.

I think the article is off to a good start. Cla68 01:03, 14 May 2007 (UTC)


 * Attack the grammar before citations - its got several areas of non-English idiom which need work to clarify meaning. GraemeLeggett 15:49, 16 May 2007 (UTC)


 * I can help you with German texts if there is need for translation or fact checking. Wandalstouring 16:37, 11 June 2007 (UTC)