Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/HMS Kelly (F01)

HMS Kelly (F01)
I have reworked the old information, added an infobox, added external links, and included some service history not previously included. I think this takes the article to at least Start class, possibly B (although that might require a little more on Crete and the sinking), and I would therefore greatly appreciate a peer review. --Davidbober 18:35, 4 April 2007 (UTC)


 * It's looking better already. Thanks for the help, gentlemen. Bloody marvellous! --Davidbober 00:10, 6 April 2007 (UTC)

Kirill Lokshin
Lots of things that can be improved, I think: More generally, the article is quite terse; any further expansion would be quite welcome at this point. Kirill Lokshin 16:12, 5 April 2007 (UTC)
 * I'm fairly certain that WP:SHIPS has a newer version of the infobox now; you might want to check what exactly they're recommending.
 * The lead needs to be longer—a paragraph or two, at least—and should briefly summarize the entire article.
 * The dates would be neater in parentheses than after commas, I think.
 * Citations! As it stands, the article doesn't actually have any explicit references.
 * The "HMS Kelly in fiction" section is quite stubby. I would suggest, if possible, rolling it into a combined "Legacy" section of some sort that would cover the aftermath of the sinking (what happened to the survivors, etc.) together with any other related material.

jackyd101
I like the article, but what you need most of all is more detail and citations. There is a book (I have it rattling around somewhere, but I just moved house and have no idea where it is) which is pretty good on shipboard tales of service on HMS Kelly and as you might expect has a lot on the sinking. It would be a good resource if you could find it. The infobox is very impressive, the technical information there is well laid out and finely detailed, good job. If you have the books mentioned in the references, then put down where all that information comes from using footnotes and then as the sections on the ship's career grows do the same there. All the best.--Jackyd101 23:37, 23 May 2007 (UTC)