Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/Italian War of 1521-1526

Italian War of 1521
I've been working on this article, on and off, for some time now. Obviously, it's not quite done, as I still have some more material I'd like to add (as well as providing the obligatory copyediting). I'm interested, primarily in an evaluation of the narrative: is the course of events understandable to someone who hasn't read the full sources? Are there any particular places that stand out as incomplete or in need of a more thorough level of detail? (I would be quite surprised if there's anyone on Wikipedia with actual knowledge of—or interest in—this particular event; but if there is someone, I'd be very grateful for any pointers on any gaps in the treatment as well, since piecing together the narrative from biographical works tend to make those difficult to notice.) Kirill Lokshin 02:24, 4 June 2006 (UTC)

Grafikm fr
I'm a complete moron when it comes to Italian history (and to just about everthing short of WWII Eastern Front, to be honest :)), but the writing is just awesome and understandable even for me (which means something)!!!

However, if this one is to achieve FAC (and it should :)) it should be expanded slightly, especially the Pavia section. A map would also be a lot of help.

That's all I can think of atm, but I'll add some thing afterwards.

Keep on the amazing work Kirill! -- Grafikm  (AutoGRAF)  21:32, 4 June 2006 (UTC)


 * Thanks for the kind words! I just recently obtained another source for the Pavia campaign, so I'll be adding some material to that shortly.  As for maps, I'll see what I can dig up; unfortunately, there aren't nearly as many maps available for the 16th century as there are for, say, WWII ;-) Kirill Lokshin 22:11, 4 June 2006 (UTC)
 * A map of the region would already do... :) And by the way, if they were many good maps for WWII, I would not redraw them all <_<... -- Grafikm  (AutoGRAF)  16:17, 5 June 2006 (UTC)
 * I've added two maps showing the general borders of the period; I'll see if I can find one where all of the locations mentioned are actually shown. Kirill Lokshin 17:02, 5 June 2006 (UTC)


 * And fairly substantial expansion has now taken place, as requested! There's still a bunch of copyediting and minor details to fix, but that should be done over the next few days. Kirill Lokshin 03:57, 15 June 2006 (UTC)