Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/Joachim Helbig

Joachim Helbig
I'm seeking feedback and re-assessment (Stub now) on this article I just worked on. Unfortunately I couldn't find much background on his personal life. Please let me know how to improve the article. Thanks MisterBee1966 (talk) 14:07, 16 December 2009 (UTC)

AustralianRupert
This is a very good article in my opinion. I've assessed as B class for the Military History project. There's not much I can say in the way of suggesting improvements. A couple of points, though:
 * there is one disambig link (Vogelsang) per the Featured article tools;
 * a sentence or two on his family and early education would be great, but as you say you couldn't find much then this is kind of a redundant point (sorry);
 * a couple more images would be great, if possible - are there any of one of the planes he flew, perhaps?
 * perhaps move the post war life information out of the In defense of the Reich section and put it in a Later life section?

Anyway, that is it. As I said, well done. Hopefully some others with aviation bio experience might be able to offer you more. Cheers. — AustralianRupert (talk) 03:57, 31 December 2009 (UTC)

Auntieruth55

 * Yes, a very good article. I've fixed some of the prepositions and such.  Also, in the lead, you put the German translations in parens, and in the body of the article, you use only the German. I've added some of the English in parens, but it should be consistent.  I've added some commas, tried to smooth out some of the language, as in Lent and Moelders.


 * This is confusing:  Schlund's ability to drive off the attacking fighter force was instrumental in a mission against the Warrington Propeller Works located north of Liverpool. Further missions included the attack and destruction of the lock entrance to the Manchester Ship Canal at Eastham and the attack ...  What did he use, his microphone?  Or did the radio operator also operate a weapon?


 * It does feel skimpy to me. Odd that some of the big-time sources (Hinchcliffe?) don't include much on him.  Do you have access to these ?
 * Antony L Kay and John Richard Smith, German aircraft of the Second World War : including helicopters and missiles, Annapolis, Md. Naval Inst. Press 2002
 * Georg Brütting, Das waren die deutschen Kampfflieger-Asse : 1939-1945, Stuttgart : Motorbuch-Verlag, 1974.
 * Hajo Herrmann, Eagle's wingsOsceola, WI : Motorbooks International, 1991
 * Christopher F Shores, Duel for the Sky, Garden City, N.Y. : Doubleday, 1985.

Auntieruth55 (talk) 00:08, 2 January 2010 (UTC)