Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/Leopard 2E (tank)

Leopard 2E (tank)
I just finished the 'rough draft' and I'm looking, as always, for criticism and ways of improving the prose (my main weakness). Any help would be great! JonCatalan (talk) 17:15, 16 June 2008 (UTC)


 * Updated Comment: Since the article failed the ACR because not enough people supported (I guess this is the reason?), I plan to go straight to FAC. So, I'd like to orient this peer review towards that goal - I plan to keep it open for a few more days. JonCatalán (talk) 12:39, 27 June 2008 (UTC)

Quick comment: do you think it might be clearer if you renamed this to Leopard 2E (tank)? :)) -- R OGER D AVIES  talk 17:21, 16 June 2008 (UTC)
 * It might, especially if you think it would (from my perspective it's clear, but to one who doesn't know the subject it might not be). Although, there is nothing that the article name can be confused with (no other Leopard 2Es). JonCatalan (talk) 17:25, 16 June 2008 (UTC)


 * WP:NAME (which is policy) talks about titles having a minimum of ambiguity. Adding (tank) removes any to my mind. -- R OGER D AVIES  talk 17:38, 16 June 2008 (UTC)
 * OK, I moved it! Hopefully, I moved everything else I had to, as well. JonCatalan (talk) 17:44, 16 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Thanks. All seems fine. Better move it now than later :) -- R OGER D AVIES  talk 17:54, 16 June 2008 (UTC)

Roger Davies
Very promising indeed. -- R OGER D AVIES  talk 20:22, 17 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Perhaps re-structure the "references" and "bibliography" sections into "Notes" (short cites) and "References" (full reference) along the lines of your Verdeja article. It's easier on the eye and avoids unnecessary repetition. You also need to identify Spanish language sources with the es icon.
 * euro is lower case.
 * Section headers are lower case, i.e. Spanish armor programs
 * Ok, references and bibliography have been renamed Notes and References, while 'Spanish Armor Programs' has been re-written as Spanish armor programs (Program Coraza I kept capitalized since it's a name), and I lower-cased 'euro'. Apparently not everyone agreed with moving it to 'Leopard 2E (tank)', so it was moved back to 'Leopard 2E' by another editor. JonCatalan (talk) 08:58, 18 June 2008 (UTC)