Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/Military operations during the Invasion of Cyprus (1974)

Military operations of the Invasion of Cyprus (1974)
Respectfully, I would like to nominate this article for peer review in order to recieve criticism about how to improve it. The article is currently graded as Start.

(User383739 16:48, 29 November 2006 (UTC))


 * Thank you all for the input. I have made a number of changes based on these recommendations:


 * 1. The orbat has been placed in context.
 * 2. Pictures and maps have been added.
 * 3. Add introductory context.


 * User383739

Kyriakos
Nice start to the article here are some suggestions.


 * You might want to put in inline citations.
 * There are quite a few short sections.
 * The article would benefit from photos or maps.
 * There too many lists in my opinion.
 * Also the article is quite short. I'm certain that you can find more books or sources on the internet to help you find infomation to improve this article.

I hope you can improve this article in the future. Kyriakos 20:00, 29 November 2006 (UTC)

Kirill Lokshin
I'll mostly second the comments that Kyriakos has already made. Somewhat more generally, the article doesn't seem to have a clear logical structure; it's half order of battle and half narrative, but the two aren't tied together in any way. It needs to be expanded with more detail, obviously, but it also should be restructured into a narrative of the military operations, with the details of the units involved being given in context with the broader picture. Kirill Lokshin 18:17, 30 November 2006 (UTC)

Balloonman
No introduction? First section is simply a list of combatants... with the exception of the fact that somebody invaded cyprus, I had no idea of what this was. Who invaded cyprus? Why? Give me some reason to read the article. I STILL have no idea as to why the Turks invaded, what they hoped to accomplish, or anything. I have no context for this article, which made reading the details of the battle unmeaningful.Balloonman 07:43, 1 December 2006 (UTC)

Yannismarou
Many problems here: I recommend:
 * There is no lead.
 * I see too many sections, most of which are stubby.
 * No inline citations.
 * Many listy secions which should turn into prose.
 * First check WP:MoS, WP:HOW, WP:LEAD and other helpful links within Wikipedia.
 * Then, start rewriting and restructuring your article.
 * Finally, ask for a new review.--Yannismarou 11:28, 6 December 2006 (UTC)