Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/Pedro del Valle

Pedro del Valle
The editors would like comments by the group on this article so it can be improved.--Oldwildbill 18:56, 29 August 2006 (UTC)

Kirill Lokshin
A very decent article. Some issues that can be worked on: Kirill Lokshin 21:14, 29 August 2006 (UTC)
 * The lead can probably be expanded to three paragraphs.
 * The awards section should, as much as possible, be turned into prose; see Aleksandr Vasilevsky for an example.
 * Headings should follow the MoS; in particular, "Works of Pedro del Valle" is redundant, and "The Banana Wars & pre-World War II" needs to be cleaned up.
 * The formatting in the works section needs to be cleaned up.
 * Since a full "References" section is provided, the notes only need to give a short-form (as in, say, Battle of Rennell Island) citation.
 * Are all the external links necessary?
 * The lone link in the "See also" section is something of an eyesore; would it be possible to work it into the text somehow?

UberCryxic
Kirill got most of the specifics. I just wanted to say that, generally speaking, this article should probably be expanded. Along with that, more in-line citations would also help. The last link under the 'References' section does not work for me. Anyone else experiencing this problem? And finally, do you have any print sources? These would go a long way to making the article more professional and encyclopedic. Overall, a nice start though.UberCryxic 18:08, 2 September 2006 (UTC)