Wikipedia:WikiProject Olympics/Peer review/1956 Winter Olympics

1956 Winter Olympics


I am submitting this for peer review because I am attempting to get this article to FAC sometime this month. This will be an important FAC as it will set the template for how the rest of the YEAR at Summer/Winter Olympics articles are going to be formatted. I am currently working on creating sub articles for all the events as there are still a ton of red links in the calendar. FA reviewers won't like that. So any help with copy editing, prose, grammar, content, or the like would be much appreciated. User:H1nkles citius altius fortius 16:06, 8 March 2010 (UTC)


 * Don't have time right now to read the whole article for spelling etc but here are a few things i've noticed...


 * 1) The major comment I'd make, which applies to large sections of the article, is that there are a lot of very short one clause sentences so the whole thing doesn't flow very well (try reading the Organizing section out loud and hopefully you'll see what I mean).
 * 2) I think organizing section needs a different title, Organization possibly or perhaps something like Preparation(s)
 * 3) Venues section - I assume The Italia Jump was for ski jumping but it doesn't state that
 * 4) Start of events section - 4 sports... two new events, should probably use either figures or words not a mixture
 * 5) Is it possible to the map with Cortina marked on it that can be found at Cortina d'Ampezzo?

Hope some of those suggestions help, I'll take a more detailed look when I get time. Basement12 (T.C) 17:11, 8 March 2010 (UTC)
 * Thanks for your input, your first comment is especially helpful as this was not something I had seen, since I'm so close to the article. I'll definitely try and expand the sentences so they aren't so stuccato and so the flow of the article is enhanced.  User:H1nkles citius altius fortius 23:44, 8 March 2010 (UTC)

Parutakupiu
Hey there, H1nkles. Months ago, when you requested a peer review for this article, I began drafting an expansion with sourcing based mostly on the official report. I did not finish this but since you came up with this project-specific peer review, instead of making comments I suggest you check my sandbox and compare my additions and changes with what you already have. Take whatever you feel it could be an improvement to the article. Cheers! Parutakupiu (talk) 22:56, 8 March 2010 (UTC)
 * Thank you my friend, you work is wonderful. I've taken some and added it to the article.  I'll continue to work through your version of the article and gleen what I can.  I'll be sure to give you credit when I post it for FAC.  Thank you.  User:H1nkles citius altius fortius 23:42, 8 March 2010 (UTC)


 * You're welcome! Pity I didn't go further, but I think that job is in good hands ;). Parutakupiu (talk) 00:00, 9 March 2010 (UTC)

Archive
Thank you for your review, I am closing it down and archiving it here. It will also be in the article history section. User:H1nkles citius altius fortius 22:37, 11 March 2010 (UTC)