Wikipedia:WikiProject Rugby league/Peer review/Jeff Shield

Jeff Shield
Doctorhawkes (talk) 00:54, 15 December 2009 (UTC)

Ginger Warrior
Firstly, I'll set my agenda. There really isn't much of this article to review, and the article is currently far away from the criteria required to award it a B-class status or higher. I'll therefore only give very general advice, given the lack of specific content to review. I'll also update the article's class.


 * The article needs a picture to gain good article status or higher. In a biography, it is especially important a picture of the person in question exists in the infobox, although there is no requirement for this to be a photograph if one is unavailable;
 * The article completely lacks structure, consisting solely of one section. If possible, the article should be divided into sections. In biographies, this is typically done chronologically, starting with their early life (birthplace, childhood, education, family etc.), or if the person is notable for two seperate things, the article needs to be divided as such;
 * Terms need to be specified. Can anyone really establish a set definition for what "junior football" means? Where possible, terms need to objectively specified, or else not used. The sentence could just as easily be written as: "Shield first played rugby league at the Waratah-Mayfield club, in the Newcastle area, at the age of 6."
 * Further to this point, use wikilinks where possible. "Leigh" should be linked to Leigh Centurions, for example, or else someone may search for the town instead of the club.


 * Acronyms should only be usedswhere they are most frequently used in common language as opposed to their full names. "NASA", "NRL", "NFL", "FIFA", for example. "New South Wales" is preferential to "NSW".
 * A minor point, but adverbs precede verbs in English. "He played primarily" should be "He primarily played".
 * Information surrounding his death is scarce. As someone who has never heard of Jeff, I'm interested to know how he died, especially if the cause of death may be especially notable.
 * As said, the article is quite bare and substantially lacking information. For instance, there is no information at all about how well he did at any of his clubs, or his personal life, or whether he came close to earning a call-up to his representative team, or his birthplace. Considerable effort is needed to repair this gap.

In summary, the article has enough references to establish notability and verifiability. The article 'covers the basics', and is no danger of being speedy deleted. There appears to be no immediate issues concerning liable material or copyright infringments. However, there is little evidence of structure in the article, and therefore, it fails to meet the standards of a C-class article. I'll reevaluate this article as a Start-class. GW (talk)  22:16, 26 December 2009 (UTC)