Wikipedia:WikiProject Tropical cyclones/Assessment/Effects of Hurricane Wilma in The Bahamas

Archived discussion. Current status: 

Looking at this article again, I think it's up to par for A-class. Any comments? --Hurricanehink ( talk ) 18:25, 30 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Ship to FAC sometime soon. Tito xd (?!? - cool stuff) 07:30, 11 May 2008 (UTC)

I might take this article to FAC in the future, so I'd like to get a little review before I do so. It's already A-class, so this is more just for another set of eyes. ♬♩ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 05:54, 29 November 2008 (UTC)

–Juliancolton Tropical Cyclone  01:17, 30 November 2008 (UTC)
 * The effects of Hurricane Wilma in The Bahamas were generally unexpected and most concentrated on the western portion of Grand Bahama. - Is "most" needed?
 * Hurricane Wilma developed on October 15, 2005 in the Caribbean Sea, and after initially organizing slowly it explosively deepened to reach peak winds of 300 km/h (185 mph) and a record-low pressure of 882 mbar (hPa). - Why is km/h first?
 * While passing the archipelago, the hurricane produced hurricane force winds and a powerful storm surge, flooding southwestern coastal areas of Grand Bahama and destroying hundreds of buildings. - Link archipelago.
 * The central portion of Grand Bahama, including in and around Freeport, reported minor to moderate damage, while the eastern end received little to no damage. - "In and around Freeport" &rarr; "the Freeport area".
 * One child died on the island from the flooding. - Did the child drown? Was his/her house collapsed? Clarification needed.
 * Elsewhere in the Bahamas, moderate damage occurred on Abaco and Bimini, while islands further to the south reported minimal wind damage. - Avoid repetition of "damage".
 * The government of the Bahamas advised citizens to rush preparations to completion, though many failed to fully prepare, believing Wilma would pass through the archipelago as a tropical storm. - Is it "The Bahamas", or "the Bahamas" (notice the capitalization)? Be sure to keep that consistent.
 * The total number of storm evacuees was small, estimated from 300 to 1,000 people evacuating. - Awkwardly worded. How about "Evacuations were minimal; it is estimated that between 300 and 1,000 people left"? If not, remove "total" and re-word "estimated from 300 to 1,000 people evacuating".
 * The surge, which reached about 305 m (1,000 ft) inland - This needs better wording, as it implies that the surge was 1,000 ft in height.
 * Damage was estimated at about $100 million (2005 USD, $110 million 2008 USD) on the western portion of the island. - "Estimated" and "about" are redundant. Pick one.
 * More than 7,000 people on the island were directly affected, many of whom had not fully recovered from hurricanes Frances and Jeanne during the previous year. - How were the 7,000 people affected? Does being hit by a little rain count as being affected?
 * A total of 400 buildings throughout the island sustained damage, of which about 200 commercial buildings were extremely damaged and recommended by engineers not to be repaired. - Not sure why, but "extremely damage" reads oddly.
 * Flooding from the hurricane killed one child on the island,[3] the only casualty directly related to Wilma in the archipelago. - Were there any indirect fatalities?
 * There, the hurricane severely damaged a hotel and eight waterfront homes. - Remove "there".
 * Throughout the Bahamas, caused damage to public infrastructure such as schools, roads, health clinics, and electrical systems. - Missing word(s).
 * Electricians restored power to the area around Freeport by the day after[2] and much of the western portion of the island by about three weeks after the hurricane. - Poorly worded.
 * Watch for overlinking and underlinking.
 * As most people failed to prepare significantly for the hurricane, hardware stores and food markets were generally well-stocked. - This bit of info would be better in the preps section.
 * The earlier effects of Wilma on Mexico left many tourist areas closed, leading to a 10% increase in tourism in the Bahamas in December 2005 due to the unavailability in resorts such as Cancún. - Note the redundancy.
 * In the See also section, remove the link to List of Atlantic hurricanes.
 * commonscat should go in an External links section, which needs to be added.
 * References:
 * What makes http://bahamasvacationguide.com/wilma/index.html a reliable source?
 * Ref #4 needs publisher info.
 * Same with ref #7.
 * Some last accessdates are in year-month-day format, and others are in Day Month year. Consistency needed.