Wikipedia:WikiProject Video games/Peer review/Massively multiplayer online role-playing game

Massively multiplayer online role-playing game
This article is now GA and is on it's way to FA status. How can it be improved before the FAC? Greeves (talk • contribs) 23:13, 25 March 2007 (UTC)

Clyde
I took a very quick look over and found some stuff to keep you busy. If I get a chance I'll look for some more problems.--Clyde (talk) 00:13, 27 March 2007 (UTC)
 * You need to specify what the fair use rationale is for in the first image.
 * To reach FA you need at least 1 citation per paragraph. Many are missing one (or several). For example, common features and history (two important sections) contain zero citations.
 * Convert online references to Template:cite web.


 * For your first point, I believe it has a fair use rationale already. Next, I'll get to referencing, but is the first paragraph alright for references though? And the conversion of the references to their proper format should be fairly easy. Thanks for the constructive criticism! Greeves (talk • contribs) 02:22, 27 March 2007 (UTC)

Well look at the image and you'll see what I meant as to your response. As to whether the first paragraph is alright for references, no it's not, since it doesn't have a single one, unless I'm looking at the wrong first paragraph.--Clyde (talk) 04:19, 27 March 2007 (UTC)


 * I was just wondering if there was a need to reference the first paragraph, I think we're looking at the same one; I'll get to referencing that one as well. For the image, on the image page it says:

It is believed that the use of this image, WoW Flying Gnomes.jpg, qualifies as fair use in the article MMORPG because:
 * Blizzard Entertainment has not released any such images into the public domain, and a replacement image could not be created that would adequately provide the same information
 * The image is web-resolution
 * The use of this image neither detracts from the game nor inhibits its salability in any way
 * The image is being used solely for informative purposes, as it serves to illustrate the form in which the game takes place


 * I don't know much about copyright stuff on Wikipedia, but does that not qualify as the rationale we need? Sorry to keep bugging you! Greeves (talk • contribs) 16:13, 28 March 2007 (UTC)


 * My mistake, I've never seen the article in question part as a sub-header and missed it. You can remove the one I put, but I may not be the only person who might miss it in the future. As to the referencing, the lead is usually one of the most heavily referenced areas in an article. To have it empty of citations was....yeah.--Clyde (talk) 00:49, 29 March 2007 (UTC)

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Lacking an introduction for non-computer gamers?
I think one of the things lacking in this article is lacking details about how MMORPG is different from other type of computer games. In general, things like, what exactly is MMORPG, how does it work? How does the artictecture work? How exactly does one player interact with another in a virtual world? What exactly is a virtual world? This article does not seem to target people who is new to computer games, I know some of these answers may have been answered already, but not in a great detail it seems. at least not to me. Anyone else like to comment on this? --Y.Ichiro (会話) 22:37, 25 April 2007 (UTC)