Wikipedia:WikiProject Video games/Peer review/Paper Mario/Archive 1

Paper Mario
Although this article has gone through two non-CVG peer reviews, I have absolutely no idea where to begin work on it. Some suggestions included critical response, history and development, further expansion on the storyline and improvement in 3D computer graphics from preceding Mario titles such as the first full-length 3D adventure Super Mario 64 (1996 &mdash; a featured article). Anybody is welcomed to review this nomination and possibly help to expand the wretched article that it currently is. I'd appreciate anything! &mdash;Eternal Equinox | talk 17:21, 18 March 2006 (UTC)
 * Uh... so is the term "peer review" going to succeed? &mdash;Eternal Equinox | talk 14:39, 22 March 2006 (UTC)
 * Typically, if you're asked to expand an article, this requires that you actually go out and find information. In other words, research. That having been said:
 * The storyline has way too many details on the setup to the plot. Cut it down to key events.
 * The paragraphs in Gameplay and battle system are too large, and most of the sections below them are too small. typically a section should have multiple paragraphs. You can combine the characters into one section and cut down on the detail.
 * The badges screenshot has no source; I've not played the game (only PM2) but I don't think that logo in the bottom left should be there. Find a clean screenshot.
 * -I have added the source for the Badge screenshot, I'll work on finding a clean shot. --Danaman5 21:42, 27 March 2006 (UTC)
 * Find an in-battle screenshot.
 * Basically, if a section has only one paragraph, it needs to be merged with another paragraph. Merge "Music composition" into "development", for example.
 * In essence, you need to reorganize the article into workable sections, and then expand them as necessary. Check out other CVG articles, see how they're organized, and work off that. Nifboy 22:50, 24 March 2006 (UTC)