Wikipedia:WikiProject Video games/Peer review/Shin Megami Tensei: Strange Journey

Shin Megami Tensei: Strange Journey
Just a general peer review. All the sections of the article have enough info (I think), so I'm looking more for comments on little things, like awkward sentences or confusing paragraphs. I'd like to eventually get the article to Good status. Thanks : ]   ? EVAUNIT 神になった人間 12:31, 6 May 2010 (UTC)
 * Comments: I'll try to get back soon with more comments, but here's a few things I'm noticing right now.
 * Change "Console role-playing game" in the infobox and introduction to "Role-playing video game" to remain consistent with the demise of the former article.
 * Sales should not be in the "Development" section, especially near the start (chronology, you know). Move them to "Reception" as this section can contain commercial reception things as well as critical.
 * Change Pokémon HeartGold and SoulSilver (in "Development") to Pokémon HeartGold and SoulSilver . Maybe it sounds nitpicky, but "and" is not part of the games' titles.
 * There doesn't seem to be any real organization to "Reception". You may want to reorganize it based on specific points (gameplay, plot, graphics, whatever) that reviewers had varying opinions on. Tezero (talk) 23:50, 7 May 2010 (UTC)
 * Back with more comments:
 * Any actual story in the "Plot" section beyond the premise is fairly vague and weirdly worked into two different subsections.
 * The section title "Bonus Soundtrack CD Defect" should just be "Bonus soundtrack CD defect" per capitalization standards.
 * Add a track listing to that section.
 * The phrase "Generally Favorable" at the start of "Reception" section should not be capitalized.
 * It's just Metacritic, not MetaCritic. Tezero (talk) 01:20, 9 May 2010 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the feedback : )  ? EVAUNIT 神になった人間 20:57, 10 May 2010 (UTC)
 * I added some more information to the character section to actually explain the story a bit more. I also tried to organize the reception section into three parts, a main section, plot, and then gameplay. Does it seem more coherent?  ? EVAUNIT 神になった人間 00:06, 11 May 2010 (UTC)
 * Looking back at the plot section, do you think I should just merge the two sections and give a more chronological story explanation? I remember when I had started working on this article, it was already split up like that, so I just went with that. ? EVAUNIT 神になった人間 00:09, 11 May 2010 (UTC)
 * The reception section looks better. About the plot section, your merge and rewrite solution sounds good. Tezero (talk) 03:16, 11 May 2010 (UTC)