Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates/Buzz Aldrin/archive1

TFA blurb review
Any thoughts or edits? (I'm posting this one early because I'll be tied up with another project for almost a month starting on the 13th. I don't know when this will be promoted at FAC.) - Dank (push to talk) 23:46, 6 March 2019 (UTC)
 * Maybe change continued to continues? I went to the university and I see updates from time-to-time on how he is still actively working with them on the concept. Also, maybe say he was awarded the Air Force Distinguished Service Medal, since normally someone with his qualifications would not be accorded the award, and perhaps the congressional gold medal, in place of He has been accorded numerous honors? Not sure the typical blurb length, so if that makes it too long then that is fine.
 * Also, one thing I had been hoping for was running Neil Armstrong, Buzz Aldrin, Michael Collins, and Apollo 11 on July 21 for the 50th anniversary event. That is pretty unusual, and perhaps not even possible, but I wanted to bring it up in case it is something you are interested in helping me pursue.  Kees08  (Talk)   02:25, 7 March 2019 (UTC)
 * Done, plus the Medal of Freedom. Pinging Jim for the date request. - Dank (push to talk) 03:16, 7 March 2019 (UTC)
 * Thanks for pinging. WikiProject_Space_2019 gives a bit of background of what is going on here, but essentially Hawkeye, myself, and others have been working on getting Apollo 11, Buzz Aldrin, Michael Collins, and Neil Armstrong to FA level prior to the 50th anniversary of the Apollo 11 landing, with the thought that maybe they could all be featured on the page at the same time. There was also a discussion and preliminary approval to 'take over' the DYK section (I only have one article done so far though..), I just reserved the July 21 POTD, and I made a request for a special run at TFL (which is not going great so far). If you think it is a bad idea to run them on the same day, or to run them on consecutive days, that is fine, just giving you the option., not sure if you had ideas for this.  Kees08  (Talk)   04:01, 7 March 2019 (UTC)


 * , I already have Armstrong on my planner for that date. We have very rarely run two FAs on the same date, I don't know whether it's feasible or desirable to run more than that. My preference would be to give each FA its moment in the sun (moon?) separately, any alternative plan probably needs wider discussion than my solo decision. I note that 20 January 2020 is Aldrin's 90th birthday. Is that worth considering (also my month to schedule on current pattern)? Jimfbleak - talk to me?  07:05, 7 March 2019 (UTC)
 * That seems fine. I am just happy the quality of the articles is high for the surge in viewership. The picture of the day is also of Aldrin's bootprint; perhaps I can direct that to Aldrin's article instead of Lunar soil. Of course, then Collins is orbiting out of the spotlight, but something tells me it won't bother him :).  Kees08  (Talk)   07:10, 7 March 2019 (UTC)

Also thanks Dank for the edits, I think it looks great.  Kees08  (Talk)   07:11, 7 March 2019 (UTC)
 * Michael Collins also has a 90th anniversary in October, another month I'll probably be scheduling. Plenty of time to get it to FA before then. Jimfbleak - talk to me?  12:07, 7 March 2019 (UTC)
 * Thanks Kees. Btw, I don't recommend either "human" or "manned" before "mission to Mars", but if people think something more is needed, putting "astronaut" somewhere would probably work. - Dank (push to talk) 12:29, 7 March 2019 (UTC)

Buzz Aldrin (born January 20, 1930) is an American former astronaut, fighter pilot, and engineer. As lunar module pilot of Apollo 11, he and mission commander Neil Armstrong were the first humans to land on the Moon. He served as an Air Force fighter pilot during the Korean War, flying 66 combat missions and shooting down two MiG-15 aircraft. His first space flight was in 1966 on Gemini 12, during which he spent over five hours outside the spacecraft. Aldrin set foot on the Moon on July 21, 1969 (UTC), nine minutes after Armstrong, while Command Module Pilot Michael Collins remained in lunar orbit. Upon leaving NASA in 1971, he became Commandant of the U.S. Air Force Test Pilot School. He developed the Aldrin cycler, an efficient Mars spacecraft trajectory, and continues to advocate for space exploration, particularly a mission to Mars. He is a recipient of the Air Force Distinguished Service Medal, the Congressional Gold Medal, and the Presidential Medal of Freedom.
 * Pinging   --valereee (talk) 21:23, 4 December 2019 (UTC)

Here's my version:

Buzz Aldrin (born January 20, 1930) is an American former astronaut, fighter pilot, and engineer. As lunar module pilot on the Apollo 11 mission, he and Neil Armstrong were the first humans to land on the Moon. A graduate of West Point and the Massachusetts Institute of Technology, where he earned a Sc.D. in astronautics, he served as an United States Air Force fighter pilot during the Korean War, flying 66 combat missions and shooting down two MiG-15 aircraft. He was selected as an astronaut with NASA's third group in 1963. His first space flight was in 1966 on Gemini 12, during which he spent over five hours outside the spacecraft. He set foot on the Moon on July 21, 1969 (UTC), nine minutes after Armstrong. Upon leaving NASA in 1971, he became Commandant of the U.S. Air Force Test Pilot School. He developed the Aldrin cycler, a Mars spacecraft return trajectory, and continues to advocate for space exploration, particularly a human mission to Mars.

I omitted the list of awards, and added his academic achievements. Hawkeye7  (discuss)  21:47, 4 December 2019 (UTC)
 * I prefer not to wikilink lunar module in lunar module pilot, just like we would not link United States Navy (United States is not the best example but you get the gist). Is space flight one word? I never remember what we do for that. His depression was a big part of his life and well advertised, but I suppose we would not be able to fit it in there. Minor quibbles, do with them what you think is best.  Kees08  (Talk)   16:41, 5 December 2019 (UTC)
 * I think in general we've got an awful lot of links here. Working from Hawkeye's version, I'm going to unlink some. Let me know what you think. --valereee (talk) 19:34, 5 December 2019 (UTC)

Here is a version to address 's request for something about his depression and alcoholism. I had to trim a bit to get in under the word count. Unlinked "fighter pilot" and "trajectory" but re-linked "Korean War" as I don't think it is well-known today.

Buzz Aldrin (born January 20, 1930) is an American former astronaut and fighter pilot. As lunar module pilot on the Apollo 11 mission, he and Neil Armstrong were the first humans to land on the Moon. A graduate of West Point and MIT, where he earned a doctorate in astronautics, he served as an Air Force fighter pilot during the Korean War, flying 66 combat missions and shooting down two MiGs. He was selected as an astronaut with NASA's third group in 1963. His first spaceflight was in 1966 on Gemini 12, during which he spent over five hours outside the spacecraft. He set foot on the Moon on July 21, 1969 (UTC), nine minutes after Armstrong. He left NASA in 1971 and became commandant of the U.S. Air Force Test Pilot School. His autobiographies Return to Earth and Magnificent Desolation recount his struggles with depression and alcoholism. He developed the Aldrin cycler, a Mars spacecraft trajectory, and continues to advocate for space exploration, particularly a human mission to Mars.
 * Hawkeye7  (discuss)  20:36, 5 December 2019 (UTC)