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Addressed comments from Crisco 1492

 * Prose comments from Crisco 1492
 * "American television medical drama" - Is television necessary here? "American television medical drama" sounds awkward to me.
 * I think it's fine, but I'll leave it up to your discretion. I took this from House (TV series), a FA. TRLIJC19  ( talk  •  contribs ) 03:13, 21 August 2012 (UTC)
 * Isaac, Shepherd, et al. have no last name?
 * I addressed the Shepherd one (can't believe I missed it), but Isaac's last name is never given. TRLIJC19  ( talk  •  contribs ) 03:13, 21 August 2012 (UTC)
 * "mess up" - Not formal. Perhaps "make a serious mistake"
 * Done. TRLIJC19  ( talk  •  contribs ) 03:13, 21 August 2012 (UTC)
 * "personal doctor" - What does this mean in this context?
 * She reminds him to eat/drink, helps him when he's tired, etc. I've changed it to "caregiver". TRLIJC19  ( talk  •  contribs ) 03:13, 21 August 2012 (UTC)
 * "Nowalk said those scenes were difficult to shoot." - Why?
 * Done. TRLIJC19  ( talk  •  contribs ) 03:13, 21 August 2012 (UTC)
 * "Dr. Robert Bray, a neurosurgeon in Los Angeles." - Related to the show how?
 * That's where the storyline about the tumor originated. TRLIJC19  ( talk  •  contribs ) 03:13, 21 August 2012 (UTC)
 * How would he know the producers, is what I meant. Was he signed as an advisor or something? — Crisco 1492 (talk) 03:25, 21 August 2012 (UTC)
 * No further context on that was given in the source, unfortunately. TRLIJC19  ( talk  •  contribs ) 03:29, 21 August 2012 (UTC)
 * "drew on the wall" - don't use this if it's not in the literal sense. If its figurative, at the very least link to fourth wall
 * No, he actually drew a diagram on his bedroom wall with markers. TRLIJC19  ( talk  •  contribs ) 03:13, 21 August 2012 (UTC)
 * Fix the CN tags (direct quotes = immediate source)
 * Done. TRLIJC19  ( talk  •  contribs ) 03:13, 21 August 2012 (UTC)
 * That's it from me. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 02:57, 21 August 2012 (UTC)
 * All done or replied to. TRLIJC19  ( talk  •  contribs ) 03:13, 21 August 2012 (UTC)