Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates/God of War II/archive1

Comments from Cirt (addressed)
&mdash; Cirt (talk) 01:19, 17 June 2013 (UTC)
 * 1) NOTE: Please respond, below these comments, and not interspersed throughout, thanks!
 * 2) Image review: File:God of War II cover.jpg and File:God of War II gameplay.jpg check out okay, however I'd recommend using WP:FURME to expand upon and standardize the fair use rationale.
 * 3) One redlink, Carole Ruggier, not necessary just suggested, could be nice to create as a sourced stub, at the very least.
 * 4) Reception - for quotations, inline cites should be at the end of any sentence with a quote, not just ends of paragraphs.
 * 5) Reception - consider trimming amount of total quotations used, and paraphrase some instead.
 * 6) References - suggest changing title of Notes sect to Works cited.
 * 7) Soundtrack - Track listing - recommend using full names for those credited in the Music column.
 * 8) Awards and accolades - this sect might work better in table format, rather than prose.
 * 9) Novel - perhaps a few secondary sources after the end of this sect, about reception of the novel itself?
 * 10) NOTE: Please respond, below these comments, and not interspersed throughout, thanks!
 * Confused on how to work FURME. I followed the directions but the "fur" tab isn't popping up on the image file as it said it would.
 * Stub made.
 * Fixed. Seems redundant if consecutive sentences come from the same source.
 * Worked on it.
 * Done.
 * Instead of using the full name on every track, I used the full name for the first instance their name appears, then last name in the following instances it appears.
 * I prefer the prose, plus not all of the items listed are awards per se (e.g., "swan song" of the PS2 era).
 * Can't really find any review for the book. It does consist of two secondary sources right now (the other being a primary - the publisher's website). When I get my hands on a copy and read it, I'll add more info to it (e.g., differences from the game) as I did with God of War's novel. -- JDC808  ♫  05:08, 17 June 2013 (UTC)
 * Thanks, looks a bit better. &mdash; Cirt (talk) 05:26, 17 June 2013 (UTC)