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Addressed comments from Crisco 1492

 * The second of his animated films, - Do you need "animated" here?
 * I guess not. Removed. Curly Turkey (gobble) 10:18, 18 August 2013 (UTC)
 * , in which a mosquito preys on a sleeping man; the mosquito's abdomen swells as it draws blood until it explodes. - you already have a synopsis above
 * Merged. Curly Turkey (gobble) 10:18, 18 August 2013 (UTC)
 * The technical quality of McCay's animation was unmatched until Walt Disney's feature films appeared in the 1930s. - do you need to repeat this? you have this in the first paragraph (kinda) as well
 * Does it really? I thought the later statement expanded on the earlier. Curly Turkey (gobble) 10:18, 18 August 2013 (UTC)
 * Few of the opinions you put forth are attributed to their originators.
 * For example? Everything in the Reception section is attributed. Curly Turkey (gobble) 10:18, 18 August 2013 (UTC)
 * " horrifying to watch", for instance. These are not NPOV terms. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 10:36, 18 August 2013 (UTC)
 * I've attributed this to McCay. I don't see any others like this.  Do you? Curly Turkey (gobble) 13:36, 18 August 2013 (UTC)
 * No, nothing as blatant. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 13:47, 18 August 2013 (UTC)
 * Why not base the synopsis on the film in the article?
 * Sorry, I don't understand. Curly Turkey (gobble) 10:18, 18 August 2013 (UTC)
 * Why not base your synopsis on the version you've already uploaded (i.e. why are you just basing it on what secondary sources say?) — Crisco 1492 (talk) 10:36, 18 August 2013 (UTC)
 * I guess I'm citation-anal. I know the rules allow us not to cite plot summaries, but that seems to me...Idunno...like copping out or something. Curly Turkey (gobble) 13:36, 18 August 2013 (UTC)
 * You may be citation-anal, and I cited anal, but anyways... it would allow you to build a longer plot summary if you need to. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 13:41, 18 August 2013 (UTC)
 * I'll keep it in mind. Curly Turkey (gobble) 20:45, 18 August 2013 (UTC)
 * How a Mosquito Operates was McCay's second film. The animated sequences in Little Nemo - doesn't quite flow right, particularly as you've already described his first film
 * Removed the first sentence. Curly Turkey (gobble) 10:18, 18 August 2013 (UTC)
 * Émile Cohl (1857–1938) - YOB/DOB at first mention, I'd think, if needed at all
 * Removed. Curly Turkey (gobble) 10:18, 18 August 2013 (UTC)
 * including a story in Little Nemo where Nemo is attacked by a swarm of mosquitoes after returning from a trip to Mars. - do we have this story on Commons?
 * I have digital copies of all of them that I aven't finished uploading to Commons. I'll hunt it down. Curly Turkey (gobble) 10:18, 18 August 2013 (UTC)
 * Tracked it down. It's File:Little Nemo 1910-10-23.jpg, in which an endless swarm of monstrous mosquitos attacks a blimp. Curly Turkey (gobble) 13:36, 18 August 2013 (UTC)
 * Link it, through a footnote maybe, like at Gertie? — Crisco 1492 (talk) 13:44, 18 August 2013 (UTC)
 * Done. Curly Turkey (gobble) 20:45, 18 August 2013 (UTC)
 * What's the point of using sfnm when you precede it with an sfn template?
 * That's to keep Crisco busy. (Fixed). Curly Turkey (gobble) 10:18, 18 August 2013 (UTC)
 * Har har. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 10:36, 18 August 2013 (UTC)
 * Otherwise looks quite nice. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 08:19, 18 August 2013 (UTC)