Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates/Mount Cayley volcanic field/archive1

Overall
 * Vast amount of over-referencing; you only need to reference a paragraph from one source once, at the end. Theres no bonus from refing the same thing multiple times! In addition there are many doubled refs in the text.
 * Handled personally. Res Mar 13:37, 29 July 2010 (UTC)

Lead
 * The Mount Cayley volcanic field is a remote north-south trending polygenetic volcanic chain on the Coast of British Columbia that stretches 31 km from the Pemberton Icefield to near the Squamish River. Is capitalizing "Coast" neccessary? Is it part of the proper name? Also, "to near" sounds akward, I'd delete near.
 * The chain is located in the Sea to Sky Country of southwestern British Columbia, Canada. I read this and thought what? Fixed by changing it to Sky-to-Sea Corridor, which makes more sense.
 *  Most of the Cayley volcanoes were formed during periods of volcanism under sheets of glacial ice... During or by?
 * During. Volcanism is not just about volcanic eruptions. It can also be the movement of magma below the surface with the formation of earthquakes.  Volcano guy  20:58, 29 July 2010 (UTC)


 *  Of the entire volcanic field, the southern portion has the most known vents. Here, at least 11 feeders Define feeder.
 * For what? Feeder is a proper term for a lava conduit.  Volcano guy  20:58, 29 July 2010 (UTC)


 * The central portion contains at least three vents situated at the Powder Mountain Icefield. To the north, at least four volcanic vents form a nearly vertical line of volcanoes. "At least" is highly repetitive here.

Geology
 * The Mount Cayley volcanic field formed because of the ongoing subduction of the Juan de Fuca Plate under the North American Plate at the Cascadia subduction zone along the British Columbia Coast. Again, Coast capatalized.
 * The interface between the Juan de Fuca and North American plates remains locked for periods of roughly 500 years. Is interface the right word?
 * Yes.  Volcano guy  20:58, 29 July 2010 (UTC)
 * K...Res Mar 03:16, 30 July 2010 (UTC)


 * It contains two masses of rock that might resemble ice-marginal lava flows. Might?
 * Yes, might. It is not always safe to say something is an ice-marginal lava flow without detailed studies just because of its appearence. It could also be a volcanic formation that has undergone extensive erosion.  Volcano guy  20:58, 29 July 2010 (UTC)
 * That's a solid reason. Res Mar 03:16, 30 July 2010 (UTC)

- This section is overall very well written, especially the latter part, but oh the over-referencing!

History
 *  The line of volcanoes has been the subject of myths and legends by First Nations. To the Squamish Nation, Mount Cayley is called ta k 'ta k mu'yin tl'a in7in'axa7en. Where did the sevens come from? oO edit: I think I understand, this is some strange encoding problem with my computer. Perhaps you should take out all the special symbols and put that in brackets, because the charset is very detailed.
 * I'll take your word on this one. Res Mar 13:37, 29 July 2010 (UTC)

Nothing for the last section.
 * Everything you listed is fine. "Coast" in "Coast of British Columbia is capitalized and ta k 'ta k mu'yin tl'a in7in'axa7en is proper.  Volcano guy  01:45, 28 July 2010 (UTC)
 * Wait so you've fixed it? Res Mar 20:31, 28 July 2010 (UTC)
 * Over-referencing is very rampid. I'm currently busy cleaning it up myself. Come on Tusk, this is the second one to my memory where you got bit for being reference-heavy...<b style="color:black;">Res</b> Mar 20:36, 28 July 2010 (UTC)
 * Have a look again. Not every sentence is referenced.  Volcano guy  20:44, 28 July 2010 (UTC)
 * Ok, references cleaned up. Tusk, how are you still ignroing the obvious? <span style="font-family:Verdana,Arial,Helvetica"><b style="color:black;">Res</b> Mar 20:57, 28 July 2010 (UTC)
 * No, I am not ignoring the obvious. I was going to do the rest when I finished removing redundant referencing in paragraphs that used only a single reference.  Volcano guy  01:10, 29 July 2010 (UTC)
 * Oh whatever it's a null point now. <span style="font-family:Verdana,Arial,Helvetica"><b style="color:black;">Res</b> Mar 13:37, 29 July 2010 (UTC)


 * Case in point: