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Addressed comments from Crisco 1492

 * Comments from Crisco 1492
 * I feel really sorry for this nom, over a month and only one review. I'll try and give you something, at least.
 * Link for Bono 2003 is broken (probably missing a "ref=harv" in the cite book template).
 * There was a mismatch in the year parameter (probably a typo). Fixed now.
 * Images all look fine.
 * The operation formed part of the Croatian War of Independence and the Bosnian War, which were wars -> you've got "war" three times in like 15 words. Try rephrasing.
 * was actually commanded by HV Major General Ante Gotovina. - sounds somewhat... underwhelming. Nominal is a good word, but would "actually" be its opposite? "In practice", perhaps?
 * was followed up by - Do you need "by" here?
 * Dinara Mountain --> Mount Dinara would probably be more standard English. Sator -> Mount Sator too
 * on the left flank of the salient: dominating the area around the RSK capital. --> Colon or comma?
 * Knin - Link?
 * Yugoslav Presidency's approval of a JNA operation to disarm Croatian security forces in January 1991. - Wouldn't this be the Yugoslav president's approval? Or "the Yugoslave Presidency's"?
 * There was 8-member collective presidency, president of the presidency was not authorised to act without a majority vote - therefore adding "the".
 * Alright, makes sense. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 16:39, 19 June 2013 (UTC)
 * wartime authorities - How can "wartime authorities" be given? Maybe "instigate wartime measures"?
 * I meant to say the army asked the presidency to authorise it to act as if it there was a state of war declared - in effect unlimited power to deploy and act militarily without further authorisation, disarm civilian authorities (police), enforce conscription, seize assets etc. I changed this bit of prose slightly, but I'm not quite sure I got the expression correctly. Could you recheck this please?
 * Looking at Google really quickly, "wartime authorities" or "wartime powers" (in other words, your original was probably fine) — Crisco 1492 (talk) 16:50, 19 June 2013 (UTC)
 * Since "wartime powers" is the solution offered right now, I assume that is fine to keep?
 * It's fine, or you can go back to "authorities". Strange how we don't have an article on the term. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 16:58, 19 June 2013 (UTC)
 * Maybe current formulation is clearer, having "state of emergency" first to lead readers in the right direction. I was equally surprised there's no such article. Should I redlink "wartime powers"?
 * Current phrasing looks quite good. I have posted at Wikipedia talk:WikiProject Military history to ask about wartime powers/wartime authorities — Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:02, 19 June 2013 (UTC)
 * Army of Republika Srpska (VRS) and Army of the Republic of Bosnia and Herzegovina (ARBiH)  - Not including the original name?
 * Standardise: % or per cent?
 * Linking countries may be overlinking, especially ones which are still extant (i.e. United States, France, and United Kingdom)
 * endorsed by Bill Clinton - You've been giving titles for everyone so far, so you should have "President Bill Clinton"
 * The body of text, overall, looks quite respectable. Will continue tomorrow or the next day. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 16:12, 19 June 2013 (UTC)
 * Thank you for taking up this review. I hope I have successfully addressed the issues above, and I'm looking forward to further comments.--Tomobe03 (talk) 16:56, 19 June 2013 (UTC)

try reviewing other nominations if you want to drum up interest in this one; I usually review 3 to 5 articles for every one I nominate. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 14:04, 20 June 2013 (UTC)
 * to a line Zeleno Hill–Šaškin Peak–Veliki Bat Peak–Točila–Grkovci–Mali Orlovac Hill–Orlovac Hill–Nuglašica–Talijanov Peak–Pitoma Kosa–Tavanak. - Not sure this is grammatical
 * I replaced the entire string of these obscure toponyms by a more general geographic reference.
 * captured the strategic 1831 m Presedla and 1777 m Jankovo Brdo peaks on 14–18 March - Should "high" be put after the heights?
 * I don't think so. These "x-metre" expressions are used as adjectives here. I could change the expressions to nouns and add "high" if you prefer as in "x metres high". Would that be better?
 * Crni Lug - Worth a redlink?
 * Not sure. There is Crni Lug redlink in the Bosansko Grahovo article so I added it anyway.
 * Otherwise quite good. I strongly suggest that you
 * Thank you for the suggestion, I trust that might help.--Tomobe03 (talk) 08:31, 21 June 2013 (UTC)