Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates/Pilgrim at Tinker Creek/archive1


 * Lede:
 * "... in 1999 it was listed in Modern Library's 100 Best Nonfiction Books." For some reason this wording bothers me. It implies that it was a list, but it could have been an individual publication or whatnot. I feel as if you are missing a descriptive noun.
 * How about, "it was included in Modern Library's list of 100 Best Nonfiction Books"? María ( yllo submarine ) 13:24, 6 March 2012 (UTC)


 * Background
 * "After she would finish a chapter, she would bring it to Moore to critique." -- Perhaps "After finishing a chapter, she would bring it to Moore to critique." or "Each chapter she wrote was brought to Moore for critique upon completion."
 * Sure; changed to your first suggestion. María ( yllo submarine ) 13:24, 6 March 2012 (UTC)


 * "Moore in particular recommended that she expand the book's first chapter..." -- As opposed to?
 * Not sure what you mean? I don't see it as oppositional -- more like "particularly", "especially", "specifically".  Would one of these words work better? María ( yllo  submarine ) 13:24, 6 March 2012 (UTC)
 * Specifically seems to work better in my opinion.
 * Changed. María ( yllo submarine ) 14:03, 6 March 2012 (UTC)


 * "... was dedicated to Dillard's husband, Richard." -- Do we really need his name here again? His name was given in the first couple of paragraphs.
 * Good point; removed. María ( yllo submarine ) 13:24, 6 March 2012 (UTC)


 * Summary
 * "In the afterword of the 1999 Harper Perennial Modern Classics edition..." -- Is the link to "afterword" necessary?
 * Eh, it doesn't hurt. :) María ( yllo submarine ) 13:24, 6 March 2012 (UTC)


 * Style and genre
 * Overlinking? I count three links to Walden thus far
 * I removed a couple. María ( yllo submarine ) 13:24, 6 March 2012 (UTC)


 * Themes
 * Theodicy - perhaps a very brief definition for those like me who have never heard the word?
 * Sure, added. María ( yllo submarine ) 13:24, 6 March 2012 (UTC)


 * Reception and awards
 * Walden is linked again.
 * I kept it in the image caption, just in case people don't want to scroll up. María ( yllo submarine ) 13:24, 6 March 2012 (UTC)


 * If I remember the guidelines correctly, the date (1854) should be with the first mention of Walden above (at the very least in the background section.)
 * Added to the lead. María ( yllo submarine ) 13:24, 6 March 2012 (UTC)


 * "... Tickets for a Prayer Wheel (1974, University of Missouri Press)" -- Worth a redlink?
 * Sure, added. María ( yllo submarine ) 13:24, 6 March 2012 (UTC)
 * Apparently it's an album :-/. Perhaps Tickets for a Prayer Wheel? Crisco 1492 (talk) 13:53, 6 March 2012 (UTC)
 * Whoops, changed to Tickets for a Prayer Wheel (book). María ( yllo submarine ) 14:03, 6 March 2012 (UTC)


 * A very interesting read and I look forward to supporting once I no longer have any issues (mostly nitpicks, looking back). Crisco 1492 (talk) 11:00, 6 March 2012 (UTC)
 * Thanks so much for the review, Crisco! I really appreciate it.  Just one question above, if you don't mind. María ( yllo  submarine ) 13:24, 6 March 2012 (UTC)
 * You're very much welcome. Crisco 1492 (talk) 13:53, 6 March 2012 (UTC)
 * All done, I think? María ( yllo submarine ) 14:03, 6 March 2012 (UTC)