Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates/Tosa-class battleship/archive1


 * Nagato class - what's with the wonky linking?
 * Some editor's been going around converting ship templates into regular links and occasionally messing things up. I didn't notice this amidst the flood of other changes that he'd been making.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:42, 20 July 2013 (UTC)
 * eight modern battleships and eight modern armored cruisers - why the repetition of modern?
 * Good catch, fixed.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:42, 20 July 2013 (UTC)
 * IJN had considered --> what's with "had"? Also, that's not a policy, it's a consideration (check the second clause here)
 * Rephrased.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:42, 20 July 2013 (UTC)
 * American President Woodrow Wilson announced plans for ten additional battleships and six battlecruisers, - Clarify that this was for the American Navy, perhaps?
 * Why would he announced a building program for any other country?--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:42, 20 July 2013 (UTC)
 * Navy Minister - got a good target for this?
 * Added.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:42, 20 July 2013 (UTC)
 * Way too many sentences beginning with "They"
 * Agreed.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:42, 20 July 2013 (UTC)
 * Curtis - have a link?
 * No.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:42, 20 July 2013 (UTC)
 * Kampon - Link?
 * Done.
 * quick-firing (QF) QF 12-pounder guns - Why repeat QF?
 * No good reason.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:42, 20 July 2013 (UTC)
 * The guns / These guns comes across as rather repetitious
 * Hopefully I've broken it up a bit.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:42, 20 July 2013 (UTC)
 * splinter bulkheads intended to contain any shell fragments and splinters - any way to avoid saying "splinter" twice?
 * Done.
 * The middle deck was the primary armored deck - Any way to avoid repetition?
 * I couldn't think of one.
 * in theory, this allowed planes to take off directly from the hangars while other planes landed on the top. - Which begs the question, how did they work in practice?
 * Added a sentence to explain the issue.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:42, 20 July 2013 (UTC)
 * Duplicate links: Mutsu, casemates aft,waterline armored belt, deck armor. In an article this short there is no use for duplicate links.
 * Agreed.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:42, 20 July 2013 (UTC)
 * Otherwise quite good. Do y'all need an image check? — Crisco 1492 (talk) 14:13, 20 July 2013 (UTC)
 * Yes, please. Thanks for your review.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:42, 20 July 2013 (UTC)