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The York City War Memorial is a First World War memorial designed by Sir Edwin Lutyens and located in York, in the north of England. A public meeting in January 1920 to decide how to commemorate York's war dead opted for a monument, over a more utilitarian memorial. Lutyens was engaged, and his first design was approved, but it was perceived to clash with York's existing architecture, and the proposed site was abandoned in favour of one just outside the city walls. Lutyens submitted a new design, of a war cross and stone of remembrance, that was scaled back to the cross alone due to lack of funds. Prince Albert, the Duke of York (later King George VI), unveiled the memorial on 25 June 1925. It consists of a stone cross 33 ft high on three stone blocks and a stone base, mounted on two further blocks and two shallow steps. It sits in a memorial garden, with an entrance designed by Lutyens. The memorial itself is a grade II* listed building.

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Hi and anyone else interested: a draft blurb for this article is above. Thoughts, comments and edits are welcome. Gog the Mild (talk) 22:54, 19 January 2020 (UTC)
 * I don't think we can really mention this one without mentioning the North Eastern Railway War Memorial given that their histories are so intertwined. The only reason the city went with Lutyens was apparently that the NER chose him and had it not been for the NER's plans it might have looked quite different. There was also a lot of controversy over the relationship between the two, and the city memorial ended up being built on land owned by the NER. HJ Mitchell &#124; Penny for your thoughts? 17:21, 27 February 2020 (UTC)


 * Hi Harry. That is always the way with blurbs, the character count is so tight. I agonised over what to cut with this one. Remember, it is only the blurb; anyone who clicks through will be immediately presented with your full lead. We actually have 41 characters - including spaces - to play with here, but I don't see that we can get much of the history in unless there is something which you think we can cut or trim. Gog the Mild (talk) 17:29, 27 February 2020 (UTC)