Wikipedia talk:Peer review/Skye/archive1

Ruhrfisch comments: Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 18:00, 28 October 2009 (UTC)
 * The lead is OK as is, but seems a bit sparse to me - this may just be personal style, but could it be expanded a bit?
 * Avoid use of words like today / now/ current ✅
 * MOS suggests spelling out per cent instead of using the symbol ✅
 * Should the inside or outside quotation marks be consistent in such as the "winged isle" or "the notched isle"[8]?
 * This just seems awkward, but I am not able to suggest a good way to rewrite it ''In the Norse sagas Skye is called Skíð,"
 * Also wonder if the metric equivalent can somehow be added / noted in ''...and W. H. Murray that "Skye is sixty miles [(100 km)] long,"
 * In Prehistory, should Neolithic be linked? ✅
 * Same section, could a clearer indication of the location of Sand be given? ✅
 * Is there anything else that could be added on Norse rule? Skye is mentioned in Etymology for example
 * WP:HEAD says not to use characters like & in headers, so change Clans & Scottish rule to Clans and Scottish rule
 * I think there needs to be more context provided for the reader in some places - for example, in the Clans section a brief explanation of the clans and how they actually ruled in Skye would help, or the Clearances section never really explains what was going on in the clearances (though it is wikilinked) or what crofters were
 * Or in Overview of population trends (could this just be Population trends?) say explicilty that people moved off the land (small farms / crofters) and into villages
 * History section seems very sparse in terms of 20th century events
 * WP:MOS says that pictures of faces should look into the text if at all possible, so could the picture of Charles Kennedy MP be right justified instead? ✅
 * It also says not to sandwich text between images, but the Skye Bridge photo and the Cuillin ridge from Portree harbour photo form a sandwich on my monitor. ✅
 * The Transport section has two paragraphs in a row that start with the Skye Bridge linking the island to the mainland - watch WP:OVERLINKing (it is linked once in each paragraph) and could these be combined somehow? Perhaps start with the ferries, then go on to the bridge?
 * The Culture section (but not The Culture of another Scot) starts with three one-sentence paragraphs - could these be combined or expanded to improve flow in the article?
 * Give years or centuries for the two long quotes in the Wildlife section
 * The Panorama template might be a nicer way to display File:Loch Fada Storr Skye restitch 2007-08-22.jpg
 * I read this with some distractions (so it might just be that) but it seemed to need a better flow from section to section in places - more of a collection of interesting facts and less a coherent whole than it probably shopuld be for FAC.
 * Comments from Colin:
 * Not sure the comment on the Gaelic name is important enough for the lead paragraph.
 * "The events of the 19th century" -- Immediately wondering "what events". Could you say here "famine and the clearances"?
 * "today" probably should be "as of 20XX". ✅
 * "now linked" drop the now. If you want to indicate how recent, then say "since XXXX,"
 * I would question "abundant wildlife". Is there more wildlife on those barren hills than any other rural part of Scotland?
 * Is the lead an adequate summary of the article, or just an introduction with a few select facts?
 * "Etymology" wouldn't be my first choice of section. It is an erudite subject to lead with. Possibly too much weight given to this aspect compared to others.
 * The article isn't consistent wrt Clan Leod, Clan MacLeod, Clan Donald, Clan MacDonald.
 * Some passive voice coupled with indirect facts: "In April 2007 it was reported in the media that the island's official name..." and "On 21 December 2004 it was announced that the Scottish Executive had purchased the bridge".