Wikipedia talk:Requests for comment/Level one user warnings/Proposed changes

Unfinished
This page appears unfinished to me. Specifically points 1 and 3 of the overview have sentence fragments. Ryan Vesey Review me!  18:22, 27 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Fixed! Thanks Ryan. In my rush to make all the parts work I forgot to give it one last once-over. :) Steven Walling (WMF) &bull; talk   18:28, 27 June 2012 (UTC)
 * On a related note, the report linked from the Rfc page doesn't exist. Ryan Vesey Review me!  18:29, 27 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Also fixed. It was just a wrong name. Steven Walling (WMF) &bull; talk   18:29, 27 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Thanks. Ryan Vesey Review me!  18:30, 27 June 2012 (UTC)

Mind the subject
Some of these templates contain sentences for which the subject is "you" and some contain sentences in which the subject is "your edit". I recommend that the structure in all templates be parallel, so whatever the subject is to be, it should be the same in all templates. In deciding which subject to use, I recommend using "you". I perceive more friendliness when one talks directly to a person than when one talks about the actions of a person to that person. Here are examples from the existing proposed templates:  Blue Rasberry   (talk)   18:51, 27 June 2012 (UTC)
 * ✅ Hello, I'm Jimbo. I noticed that you made a comment that seemed less than civil, so...
 * ❌Hello, I'm Jimbo. Your recent edit appears to have added incorrect information, so...
 * I prefer "your recent edit," rather than "you." Reason: The friendly editor should be sending an "I" message rather than a "you" message. Chastising somebody for his or her action is not very friendly. "You did a booboo!" is not as polite or effective as "I reverted what could be considered a boobo" or something like that. What do others think? Yours, GeorgeLouis (talk) 01:17, 7 July 2012 (UTC)

Verbs of the head
I prefer that verbs of the head have the word "that" after them. Right now, most templates say, "I noticed that you..." and one says, "I noticed you..." I prefer that they all be the same, and if a decision is to be made, I prefer that "that" be used.  Blue Rasberry   (talk)   18:54, 27 June 2012 (UTC)
 * ✅ Steven Walling (WMF) &bull; talk   19:18, 27 June 2012 (UTC)

Parallel structure in thanks
Some end with "Thanks," and others end in "Thank you." They should all be the same.  Blue Rasberry   (talk)   18:56, 27 June 2012 (UTC)
 * I think that's just one difference between the current default and new versions? So far as I can see, we standardized on "Thanks," Steven Walling (WMF) &bull; talk   19:04, 27 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Ahh, I was wrong. I see. And I prefer "Thanks, Name".  Blue Rasberry    (talk)   19:33, 27 June 2012 (UTC)

Verbose . ..
In uw-biog1: "please feel free to come ask me on my talk page." Should be just "feel free to ask me," omitting "come." Also, perhaps there are just too many "pleases" in the other sections as well. What do others think? GeorgeLouis (talk) 01:12, 7 July 2012 (UTC)


 * I think at least as far as uw-biog1, you're 100% correct. Be bold my friend. :) Steven Walling (WMF) &bull; talk   03:59, 7 July 2012 (UTC)
 * Okay, Steven Walling (WMF) &bull;  talk   17:37, 9 July 2012 (UTC)

'In the future . . . '
Personally, I am always annoyed when somebody says, "In the future . . . ", as in ''In the future, it would be helpful to others if you described your changes to Wikipedia with an edit summary. . .  I'd like: We have an edit summary where you can explain just how and why you made a change; it's very helpful to all the other editors.'' GeorgeLouis (talk) 01:25, 7 July 2012 (UTC)

Repetition
"I wanted to let you know that I undid one of your recent edits, such as the one you made to Science with this edit"

How about "your recent contributions" instead of "edits"? benzband ( talk ) 20:21, 22 July 2012 (UTC)


 * I think that works. Steven Walling (WMF) &bull; talk   22:40, 23 July 2012 (UTC)

Overly first-person warnings vs a modicum of passive voice
I re-opened discussion at Wikipedia talk:Requests for comment/Level one user warnings with the above title, with some questions for which answers would be appreciated from the principals. It has received comments about real-world use of the new level 1's. --Lexein (talk) 23:17, 19 August 2012 (UTC)