Talk:1927 World Snooker Championship/GA1

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 18:09, 30 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Shall review MWright96 (talk) 18:09, 30 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

Lead[edit]

  • "but it is now recognised at the inaugural edition" - typo; should be as
  • "Ten players entered the competition, including most of the leading billiards players." - Try not to begin a sentence with a number
  • "The highest break of the tournament was 60, compiled by Albert Cope in his match against Davis." - in what frame was the highest break made?
  • "It remained the best in the Championship until Davis made a 61 in the 1929 final." - It remained the highest break
  • Wikilink 1929 final to the relevant article

Background[edit]

  • "in 1924 from professional Tom Dennis had been rebuffed by the BACC's Secretary A. Stanley Thorn," - how about rejected instead?
  • "Davis drafted the conditions under which a Championship could take place," - the word in bold doesn't need to begin with a capital letter
  • "The Stanley Thorn, wrote that the decision to promote a professional championship" - don't think that Thorn's actual correct full name
  • "Gate receipts for each match, after expenses, were to equally shared out between the players concerned." - were to be equally
  • "Snooker historian Clive Everton wrote that when the professional snooker championship was introduced, "billiards was still very much the premier game, with snooker a sideshow which few were convinced would ever come to much as a public entertainment," and that the early championships received "minimal publicity." - repetition of "championship(s)"
  • "Ten players entered the championship." - try not to begin a sentence with a number
  • "had declined to participate in the championship[8]" - a full stop is missing before the reference and after the word "championship"

Schedule[edit]

  • The Reference column can be deleted and the references put into a table header called "|+1927 World Snooker Championship schedule" or something similiar
  • Hopefully I've implemented this as suggested - if not, I'll try again. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 22:21, 30 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Summary[edit]

  • "The snooker was played as an added extra to the main event, a billiards match." - snooker game
  • Wikilink table to billiards table for those unfamiliar with snooker and pockets to the relevant article only on the first mention
  • "The match started on Monday 29 November 1926 with two sessions per day until Saturday 11 December." - don't think the names of dates are needed
  • The terms frame and session should be wikilinked to the relevant article only on the first mention
  • "In the evening session Dennis won the first two frames to win 8–6." - repetition of "won"
  • "He two more frames in the afternoon to lead 14–5" - He took two
  • "Cope's 60 break was the highest made in the tournament," - Cope's break of 60
  • " and in recognition of this Cope later received a commemorative certificate from the BACC." - would receive
  • 1929 final can be linked to 1929 World Snooker Championship
  • "Like the Inman v Newman match it was played as an added extra to a billiards match." - As with the game between Inman and Newman
  • "but Dennis won the first two in the evening to win the match 12–10." - repetition of "won" and "match"

Final[edit]

  • "Davis had taken a winning lead by taking frame 23 80–34"- little awkward; can be taking the 23rd frame 80–34
  • "Davis won four of the seven frames on the final day to win 20–11." - repetition of "won"
  • "Davis went on to win the World Championship each year until 1940," - every year

Main draw[edit]

  • "Match results are shown below. Winning players and scores are denoted in bold text.[18][20][22][25][28][33][36][44][51]" - an example of WP:OVERCITE. Think the last citation can be used on the text and the rest of the references be put in the correct places on the draw bracket
  • As match info and dates are already sourced earlier in the article, I thought it would be better to cut refs down here. The Snooker Scene source has all the results, but not countries, so I looked elsewhere for that and came up against a hiccup I've tried to deal with via efn. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 22:16, 30 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Notes[edit]

  • The note will need to be referenced and a full stop is missing

Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above MWright96 (talk) 19:18, 30 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for another helpful and comprehensive review, MWright96. Let me know what else needs to be done. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 22:41, 30 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
@BennyOnTheLoose: Now promoting to GA class MWright96 (talk) 06:46, 31 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
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