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"Carl Edwards finished second, and Jeff Gordon finished third." - you don't need the comma. « Gonzo fan2007(talk) @ 19:30, 10 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Done
Race report
"In the battle for third place, Dodge had 78 points, now even with Ford." - recommend changing to the simpler "Dodge and Ford were tied for third place with 78 points."
I have tweaked the sentence a bit from the suggestion. Kpgjhpjm 15:44, 11 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]
"In the first practice session, which was held in dry conditions," - was the second race not held in dry conditions? Why is this important to note?
Removed, I was planning to do it before the review but thought of the reviewer's opinion . Kpgjhpjm 15:44, 11 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]
" Tony Stewart only managed to qualify third, and Greg Biffle qualified fourth." - why "only"? Recommend removing.
"Conditions were sunny with a high 88 °F (31 °C), making the track potentially slippery early in the race." - why would sunny weather be slippery?
Tweaked by adding a line from citation . Kpgjhpjm 15:44, 11 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]
"who had stated second passed McMurray to lead the first lap." - do you mean "started"?
Done
"Two laps later, David Reutimann moved into sixth, after passing Sam Hornish, Jr.." - the period in his name is sufficient. You can remove the 2nd one.
I am a bit confused here . What do you mean by second one ?
Sorry Kpgjhpjm, I mean that the period in Sam Hornish, Jr. name is sufficient to end a sentence. You don't need "Jr.." - it can just be "Jr." « Gonzo fan2007(talk) @ 15:56, 11 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]
But that is a full stop. Kpgjhpjm 15:08, 12 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]
You link engine failure, which redirects to Turbine engine failure, which is about airplanes. I think engine failure is a simple enough concept that you can leave it unlinked.
Done
I have a few general concerns about the "Race" subsection:
Admittedly, I am not very familiar with these types of articles, but this section seems too detailed and long. If there are a few examples of similar good articles you could point me to, that would alleviate my concern.
This sub-section is reliant on almost one source. It is not a huge deal, but it would be nice to have at least a few different sources. « Gonzo fan2007(talk) @ 21:08, 10 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks, note that you have to add a colon before the link to link to a category, i.e. [[:Category:GA-Class NASCAR articles]]. « Gonzo fan2007(talk) @ 16:02, 12 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]
It means starting position. Kpgjhpjm 15:44, 11 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Why the break between Travis Kvapil and Michael McDowell in the table?
Because they failed to qualify. Added . Kpgjhpjm 15:23, 12 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]
In both tables, Source should be Sources, and put a space after the colon but before the references themselves. « Gonzo fan2007(talk) @ 19:30, 10 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Per WP:IMAGESIZE, please remove all of the fixed px sizes in the images. Thumbnails default size and are more accessible.
Done
In my opinion, File:JamieMcMurrayBristolAugust2007.jpg should be on the right side of the article. The formatting looks much better, and I even previewed it in various screen sizes.
You use the |location= parameter in a few references. This parameter is for the physical publishing location, not the website. I would remove or replace with |website=
Per MOS:DUPLINK, please remove all of the double links that are found in the main body of the article (mostly the names of the drivers). Duplicate links are ok in the lead, infobox, and table, but usually not the main body of the article. « Gonzo fan2007(talk) @ 19:41, 10 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Done If three is any left please tell me .Kpgjhpjm 15:42, 12 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Done
