Talk:Alan Pastrana/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 04:46, 22 November 2010 (UTC)

I'll review this article shortly. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 04:46, 22 November 2010 (UTC)

Here are the issues I found:

• "is an American former football quarterback." modify to 'former American football quarterback' with qb and af linked

• Y Strikehold (talk) 01:34, 25 November 2010 (UTC)

• I'd throw a bit of his coaching career in the lead as well, since it's a bit short as is.

• Y Strikehold (talk) 01:34, 25 November 2010 (UTC)

• "on the defense" on defense

• Y Strikehold (talk) 01:34, 25 November 2010 (UTC)

• "cartilage and his medial collateral ligament" do you mean 'cartilage in his' or did he tear that elsewhere?

• I believe these are separate pieces of tissue, the MCL being a ligament. Strikehold (talk) 01:34, 25 November 2010 (UTC)

• "he saw action in two games, and did" that comma's not needed.

• Y Strikehold (talk) 01:34, 25 November 2010 (UTC)

• "where he was still teaching as of 2006" any update if he still is? that's a 4 year gap now.

• Unfortunately, not that I could ascertain during my research. Strikehold (talk) 01:34, 25 November 2010 (UTC)

I'll put the article on hold for a week and pass it when the issues are fixed. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 17:36, 22 November 2010 (UTC)

Everything looks good now, so I'll pass the article as a GA. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 04:52, 25 November 2010 (UTC)