Talk:Banded stilt/GA1
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Reviewer: FunkMonk (talk · contribs) 08:35, 6 April 2017 (UTC)
- Not much left to do bird-wise at FAC, so I'll get back to GANs... FunkMonk (talk) 08:35, 6 April 2017 (UTC)
- The photos used show the birds form afar, so I'm wondering whether this one could maybe be added, which shows them a little closer?[1]
- yeah, that is a little closer...switched Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:36, 6 April 2017 (UTC)
- It seems strange that Vieillot depicted the bird with a recurved beak[4], when the photos show straight beaks. Any explanation for this? The text here also doesn't state whether the beak is straight or curved, so it is a bit confusing.
- The definitive and exhaustive HANZAB source (amazingly) does not specify whether the bill is straight or curved upwards. My own recollection and also observation of photos is that the bill is very slightly upcurved. I will see if a source discusses the shape of the bill somewhere Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 13:35, 6 April 2017 (UTC)
- Some authorities are presented with occupation and nationality, others are not, should probably be consistent.
- "L'avocette a tete blanche" If we include French sentences, they should be explained.
- "Leptorhynchus pectoralis, to the Royal Academy of Belgium in 1835." Needs citation.
- "noting that the name Leptorhynchus had been previously used" For what?
You state it was initially placed in Recurvirostra, but you don't link it or explain that this was an already existing genus with other species in it.
- I'd spell out sister taxon, simply saying "sister" seems too esoteric for regular readers.
- "the species has also been called locally Rottnest snipe" The placement of "locally" here seems odd to me, but well, I'm no native Anglophone...
- "attack by (presumably) foxes" Why is parenthesis needed here? Just saying "presumably by foxes" would be less convoluted?
- "1500 km", "20,000 km2", and "2263 km". Conversions?
You introduce Reece Peddler with full name and occupation twice in succession.
- "Birds on nests always face into the wind." Why is this shoert sentence hanging alone? Seems it would fit in the former paragraph.
- "Baby banded stilts are covered in white down." Nestling? "Baby" seems very general and anthropomorphic.
- "Birds also chatter softly and tunefully while on the nest." The italics here seem to be a mistake (inherited from the former sentence?).
- I'd move the paragraph about clutches before the text about incubation.
- "—and mobile with open eyes (precocial)" And are? Or just are?
- "Banded stilts migrate to these lakes in large numbers and assembling in large breeding colonies." And assemble?
- "three to four white, brown or black eggs" The breeding section says they are white with black or brown splotches. The intro makes it seem like the entire eggs can be black or brown...
- Do we need scientific names for other mentioned species in the intro?
- All looks good, before passing, I'd like to see if something on the shape of the bill can be found after all... Seems it would be good to clarify in relation to its relatives, which seem to have much curvier beaks... FunkMonk (talk) 08:21, 7 April 2017 (UTC)