Talk:Danny Higginbotham/GA1
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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 04:32, 24 March 2016 (UTC)
Hi! I will take up this review. Sainsf <^>Feel at home 04:32, 24 March 2016 (UTC)
Lead[edit]
Loan spell may be linked to Loan (sports)- Can we have money conversion templates wherever possible in the article?
both the semi-final and the final. Why is only "final" linked?but injury meant he missed out on both the semi-final and the final. Could be reworded as but missed out on both the semi-final and the final due to injury.What injury was it?Born in England Why is his birthplace repeated? That too here?after a long career You can add how many years long the career wasWe do not generally keep citations in the lead, I would like them just in the main text. And please ensure that all facts of the lead are also mentioned in the main text.
Playing career[edit]
but despite passing his eleven plus exam he was denied entry into Altrincham Grammar School for Boys Could be separated into a new line.His elder brother His name?
Manchester United[edit]
- and asked to return to Old Trafford I think "was" asked would be clearer
However he recovered However, heHowever following defeat However, followingHowever following defeat in a play-off game Higginbotham was banned from football for a year for his involvement in an attack on referee Amand Ancion by teammate Ronnie Wallwork Can this be split? It would be easier to read
Derby County[edit]
Duplinks: Denis Irwin, Premier League, Old Trafford, Southampton
Southampton[edit]
Duplinks: Premier League, Southamptonon loan until "loan" can be linked as I suggested in the lead- fee of £1.5 million. Money conversion?
but was an unused substitute for the final against Arsenal. Source?
Stoke City[edit]
- an initial fee of £225,000 Money conversion?
- The Potters went seven games Have "Potters" been linked earlier
Sunderland[edit]
- fee of £2.5 million, possibly rising to £3 million Money conversion?
Duplink: Premier League
Return to Stoke City[edit]
Duplinks: Premier League, Tony Pulis, Wolverhampton Wanderers, Bolton Wanderer, FA Cup, Newcastle United
Later career[edit]
Duplink: Sheffield UnitedAfter making seventeen appearances Numbers equal to or above 10 are typically kept in digits.
International career[edit]
manager, Allen Bula is --> manager, Allen Bula, isCan friendly be linked?
Personal life[edit]
entitled: 'Rise of the Underdog'. --> entitled Rise of the Underdog.His first born child, Jak, was born in 2001 --> His first child, Jak, was born in 2001I think the first marriage and his first wife should be mentioned before the children.
That should be all. Good luck! Sainsf <^>Feel at home 15:22, 24 March 2016 (UTC)
- OK thanks! What are these money conversion templates?--EchetusXe 17:45, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
- EchetusXe Thanks for the response! I have seen money conversion templates being used in some similar articles, but I am clueless about their documentation as well. It is not a GA requirement anyway, so we need not mess with that. And I was asking if you have wikilinked "Potters" anywhere. Sainsf <^>Feel at home 18:00, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
- OK cool, would you like me to link "Potters" to Stoke City F.C.?--EchetusXe 18:03, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
- Sure, that should be proper. That done, I would be glad to promote this article. Sainsf <^>Feel at home 18:04, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
- OK, have done that. Many thanks!--EchetusXe 22:40, 27 March 2016 (UTC)
- No more issues, I am happy to promote this. Great job! Sainsf <^>Feel at home 05:50, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
- OK, have done that. Many thanks!--EchetusXe 22:40, 27 March 2016 (UTC)
- Sure, that should be proper. That done, I would be glad to promote this article. Sainsf <^>Feel at home 18:04, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
- OK cool, would you like me to link "Potters" to Stoke City F.C.?--EchetusXe 18:03, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
- EchetusXe Thanks for the response! I have seen money conversion templates being used in some similar articles, but I am clueless about their documentation as well. It is not a GA requirement anyway, so we need not mess with that. And I was asking if you have wikilinked "Potters" anywhere. Sainsf <^>Feel at home 18:00, 26 March 2016 (UTC)