Talk:Desert Inn/GA1
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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 15:29, 17 December 2015 (UTC)
I'll finish this one soon! JAGUAR 15:29, 17 December 2015 (UTC)
Initial comments[edit]
- I think the lead could mention a little about its final days and its closure in 2000?
- "and was affectionately called the "DI" by Las Vegas locals" - minor as hell, but the lead uses the initials 'D.I.'
- The sentence "In 1959, Lawrence Wien, owner of New York City's Plaza Hotel purchased the hotel, but signed a management deal for Clark to remain as manager" in the history section is too short and would be better off being merged with something, to improve prose flow
- "and he was forced to sell up and sell his share in the Sands Hotel and Casino" - repetition of 'sell'
- "where it was held in 1967 and 1968 before moving to the La Costa Resort and Spa for the following three decades; it currently meets in Hawaii" - this doesn't have a citation. Is "it currently meets in Hawaii" relevant here?
- "to display some of Wynn's art collection, The remaining St. Andrews Tower" - no capital
- "On January 27, 2000, the Megabucks jackpot record" - what are Megabucks?
- "earning £$10 million a year" - £$?
- "The hotel remained a welcoming place to locals until the end" - sounds informal
All addressed, some good points, cheers. Jaguar. Megabucks is probably quite well known in the Vegas world. read here. I don't think we need to explain it, but there should probably be an article on it.♦ Dr. Blofeld 16:34, 17 December 2015 (UTC)
On hold[edit]
Great article! No dead links, well written and comprehensive. I'll leave this on hold until all of the above are out of the way JAGUAR 15:52, 17 December 2015 (UTC)
Cheers for the prompt review Jaguar. Will address shortly.♦ Dr. Blofeld 16:08, 17 December 2015 (UTC)