Talk:East Carolina University/GA Drive Archive

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Peer review by LaraLove

I've done quite a bit of the work myself. I took care of a few of the issues noted by the automated review. Dates, location of refs, some of the issues with the ref formatting. I didn't have time to do it all. However, below are the issues I noticed:

  • I tagged a statement that references 2008. I'm not sure if that's a post-dated publication or a typo.
    • Its supose to be for 2008, they make the date for the next year.
  • The quotes from the school website, which I have tagged, flag a NPOV issue for me. School and business websites tend to exaggerate and/or use words that show them in the best possible light, so to speak. Rather than include quotes boasting excellence and such, include information that shows it.
    • The NPOV sentence is gone.
  • I have also tagged a statement as vague. "The professional staff of nine, six of whom are Pirates, housed in the Taylor-Slaughter Alumni House..." - Which are housed in the T-SAH? The nine or the six?
    • Sentence is fixed
  • I personally do not like the notable alumni paragraph. The prose seems unencyclopedic to me. I've always seen bulleted lists of notable alumni, which I find to be more appropriate.
  • Currently, there is an inconsistency with conversions, i.e. 82,095 square feet (7627 m²).
  • Under "Traditions and events", I don't think the events should be emboldened. I would think italicizing would be more appropriate.
    • Fixed
  • References:
    • I'll have to double check, but I believe the dates for references should be written out (January 1, 2007) as opposed to the current style (2007-01-01).
    • References used multiple times, such as "McLawhorn, E. Warren, Williams (2007-03-05). A Joint Resolution honoring East Carolina University on the University's Centennial Anniversary. (pdf). House Joint Resolution 460. General Assembly of North Carolina. Retrieved on June 10, 2007.", should be named. To do this, in its first occurrence, just change <ref> to <ref name="whatever"> and leave the closing tag as is. In subsequent uses, only place <ref name-"whatever"/> after sentence. It stands as the opening and closing tag, so no </ref> is needed for those.
    • PDF files do not need (pdf) noted considering the image icon that is automatically generated. It is also preferred that page specifications be included for PDF files, particularly if they include many pages. In the case of the above example (McLarhorn), naming the reference would not be appropriate if different pages were being cited.
    • Several references have formatting issues/missing information. Also, the inclusion of (in English) for ref 80 is unnecessary.

*Images: Idealy, images should be located in the section for which they depict.

Regards, LaraLoveT/C 06:14, 24 June 2007 (UTC)

Peer review by Epbr123

  • There shouldn't really be bold text or external links within the prose.
  • The Administration and Greek life sections should be expanded as they are currently too short to deserve their own sections.
  • "At the last Board of Trustees meeting," - this will eventually become outdated. Its best to state when the meeting was. Epbr123 21:38, 1 July 2007 (UTC)

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Review by Ruslik0

I think this is an example of a well written, well sourced artcile. It covers all major topics connected with the university. The article certainly deserves to be in the GA list. However two issues:

1) The lead it too short it should be expanded up to 4 paragraphs and provide more complete summary of the content;
2) The subdivision of the "Future of East Carolina" subsection" into three subsubsection is not necessary.

I will put the article on hold and hope that the issues will be resolved quickly. Ruslik 09:27, 12 July 2007 (UTC)

The new paragraph, you added, states: "East Carolina's name changed from a teacher training school in 1907 to a university in 1967." So I realy don't understand when the name was changed. Besides I think the name change itself is not important. What is important is a trasformation from a training school into a university. The lead must not introduce any new information not mentioned in the body of the article. However starting with GetEducated.com it does. In addition, only inline refs need to be used instead of citations like "Best Buys Online MBA, AACSB, 2006". Numbers like #1 also aren't very good. In my opinion the addition of this paragraph didn't make the lead better. My advice to you is: read WP:LEAD then read the article and write a decent leading section, it should not be so difficult after all!
I also noticed that a different editor copy-edited this article mainly decapitalizing various words (see history). While I don't have objections you need to read the article again. He also added "citation needed" tag into "Traditions and events" subsection. This should be dealt with. Ruslik 07:35, 13 July 2007 (UTC)
The lead is good now. Ruslik 18:51, 15 July 2007 (UTC)
That editor was me. I was trying to make sure that the article was consistent in its use of various terms, as well as correcting what I saw as typos and grammatical mistakes (see below comment). F'rinstance, I don't know that it matters whether it's "Field Station" or "field station," but the use should be consistent throughout.
The {{fact}} tag was added because you detail information about two "secret societies" on campus, calling them "benevolent and philanthropic." If they're truly secret societies, then there's likely not many reliable sources about them (unless you're talking about something as well known as Skull and Bones, for example). If there are reliable sources, then you need to cite one, especially if you're going to call them "benevolent and philanthropic." Esrever 12:50, 13 July 2007 (UTC)
I truly mean no offense, but when I think of a Good Article, I usually expect that it doesn't have typos and grammar mistakes. This one did, though I think I've fixed most of them. Esrever 22:38, 12 July 2007 (UTC)
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