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Edge of the Ocean has been listed as one of the Music good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
Review: May 28, 2016. (Reviewed version).

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GA Review process[edit]

Although this song is quite notable, there are few readily available sources for the song on the internet. I would like the reviewer to consider this while reviewing the article; thank you! Carbrera (talk) 00:52, 15 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

GA Review[edit]

This review is transcluded from Talk:Edge of the Ocean/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: MarioSoulTruthFan (talk · contribs) 18:35, 21 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, I'm User:MarioSoulTruthFan and I'll be reviewing this article in a short time.

Lead[edit]

Link → music critics

Done

The single was subsequently considered Ivy's signature song, due to heavy promotion → this is not said in the article, add it and source.

Done

Background[edit]

later interview → When?

Done fixed per date of interview; good catch!

...the idea of incorporating new genres into their music; → full stop after music, then capital letter.

Done

stated that → doesn't need "that".

Done

"the first songs [we] recorded were jangly and simple and straight-ahead. We started gravitating toward the groovier, slightly more melancholy stuff. It works well with Dominique's voice" → use your own words in some of this quote.

Done re-worded

"Along with the exploration came "stronger" songs" → sounds terrible.

Done re-worded

Composition and release[edit]

Musically, "Edge of the Ocean" is an indie pop and trip hop song; → full stop and sources.

Done

"The single was not released elsewhere until May 27, 2002, when it was released as a CD single in the United Kingdom" → in spite of being a unreliable source, the date only has 2001.

Not done. The source is now reliable but there is no, month or day of the release. Still only year.

Critical reception[edit]

Flawless.

Done Hey thanks!

Music video and promotion[edit]

The video begins with Durand casually walking around in California near the ocean; several shots of nearby boats, cliffs and landscape are interwoven as Durand mouths the song's lyrics. Chase and Schlesinger also appear in the video. → source.

Done YT video is the only source regarding the video out there (that I can find, and trust me, I've looked)

The track was later joked about, with a reviewer noting that "chances are you've heard it and didn't even know it". → not sure if this is the best section for this piece of information.

Done moved

Track listings and formats[edit]

See on References section, below.

Done

Credits and personnel[edit]

Link mixing, mastering and such only once in this section, in other words, most of them are not linked and need to be once.

Done

Charts[edit]

Use → Template:Single chart

Done

Release history[edit]

See below

Done

References[edit]

Lot's to do here:

andychase.com → Andy Chase

Done

Discogs is not reliable → replace it.

Done I have added additional reliable sources (Amazon) for verification

Since the the information is the same in both sources, you can remove the Discogs websites. Otherwise, Ovelinking. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 11:55, 26 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

15 → Despite being the official video, it's not official source (Ivy's channel), use MTV or other.

I'm not sure what you want me to change regarding this

I was saying to find a reliable source for the video, but since you can't find it with your research and I couldn't as well. Let's leave it at that.

IMDb → unreliable source, replace it.

Done replaced

Overall GA review[edit]

Some good and solid info, needs some work here and there. Otherwise is quite good, I'll put it on hold for a week. If you need more time, just let me know. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 19:08, 21 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@MarioSoulTruthFan: I have finished making changes. Thanks as always! Carbrera (talk) 01:56, 26 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Carbrera: I will see the changes, once I have concluded checking them. I will let you know. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 11:42, 26 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Carbrera: I totally forgot to ping you, I have re-evaluated you fixes and it's almost a pass. 2 more fixes to do. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 13:31, 28 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@MarioSoulTruthFan: I think it's all caught up now. Thanks! Carbrera (talk) 21:40, 28 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Carbrera:. No need to remove the sentence just the release date. Leave the year. Still have to remove the discogs references. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 21:43, 28 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@MarioSoulTruthFan: Done. Carbrera (talk) 21:45, 28 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Carbrera: passing now. Congrats with so little information you did an outstanding job. Always a pleasure reviewing your articles. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 22:48, 28 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@MarioSoulTruthFan: Thank you for the nice comments. The feeling is mutual. Carbrera (talk) 22:58, 28 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]