Talk:Forza Horizon/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: ProtoDrake (talk · contribs) 22:52, 4 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I think I'll enjoy this one. If I haven't given you anything by Monday, ping me. --ProtoDrake (talk) 22:52, 4 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Comments[edit]

The leads needs rewriting. There's no info on its reception, way too much gameplay information, and do we really need to know anything about a rumoured game in the lead or such a detailed resume of later titles? There is also what appears to be scene setting in the lead which doesn't occur later in the article, which goes against what a lead generally does.
"Gameplay" features no mention of the game's genre. It's also somewhat unencyclopedic in tone, looking more like a journalistic article than anything else.
The entire last paragraph of "Gameplay" is uncited.
From the Ferarri Dino image; "Extremely rare unicorn cars such as the Ferrari Dino 246 were added to increase game's community presence" - Did you mean "increase the game's community presence"?
Link downloadable content, and if used in future paragraphs put "(DLC)" and use the DLC abbreviation for brevity.
Second to last paragraph of "Development" is uncited.
"Playground Games worked with DJ Rob da Bank–also being the founder of a music festival, Bestival" - This needs rephrasing. Too, many, breaks.
"a more authentic music festival experience" - Just "a more authentic experience" would do.
"In Japan, Famitsu gave it a score of one eight, one nine, one ten, and one nine for a total of .[43] " - You really don't need all those "one [...]" bits in there. Just say it "gave it a score of36 out of 40 points".
Generally, there are too many quotes and not enough paraphrasing in the prose. Plus a lot of repetition because of this, turning the article into a tedious read.
None of the YouTube-based "Making of" videos exist anymore, or at least not at their current URLs. This needs fixing. Also they all link to a playlist by ; if possible make them officially released stand-alone videos rather than part of a playlist.
Several references need filling out with additional information such as the publisher, author, date, ect.
The wikilink for the VideoGamer.com interview is red. Need removing.
The links to the Digital Fix, Game Revolution and the Globe and Mail need archiving and url updating if possible.

@Tiraboschi: Putting this article on hold, and hopefully the issues above can be sorted as they're quite glaring faults with the article. --ProtoDrake (talk) 14:31, 6 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@Tiraboschi: While minor faults have been addressed, the larger faults have not and prevent this article from passing. I've therefore decided to Fail this article. When suitable improvements and fixes have been made, this article can be renominated. --ProtoDrake (talk) 12:50, 15 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]