Talk:Great hammerhead/GA1

GA Review

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Hi, I am reviewing this article for GA. It is a generally good article. I have a few comments regarding the prose which I am sure you can easily address. —Mattisse (Talk) 22:33, 27 April 2009 (UTC)

Comments

• "prey items" - prey is enough, "items" is unnecessary - so I have removed "items"

• OK

• the cephalofoil functions to pin down stingrays, - what does "pin down" mean? I interpreted it to mean that it kept the population of stingrays down, but then in the article I see you mean literally pin down. I don't think this wording is good for the lead.

• Changed to "immobilize"; open to other suggestions

• "The great hammerhead was first described as Zygaena mokarran in 1837 by the German naturalist Eduard Rüppell, who changed it to Sphyrna mokarran later that year" - what is "it"

• "It" being the name; made it explicit

• "However, for a long time" - vague, not encyclopedic wording

• Changed to "over 200 years"

• "coined" - are scientific names coined?

• In the sense that the person who describes it picks the name, yes

• "The lectotype for this species is a male from the Red Sea." - what does this mean?

• A lectotype is a specimen chosen after a species has already been described, to serve as the type specimen for that species - I thought it'd be distracting to explain all this in the article

• "the ancestral condition" - unclear what this means

• The ancestral condition is the trait exhibited by the ancestors, in this case it means the earliest hammerheads had large cephalofoils - reworded to make this clearer

• "Its presence is uncertain off Gambia, Guinea, Mauritania, Sierra Leone," - what does this mean?

• It's what the IUCN report says; I'd interpret it as meaning that there are large hammerheads in those regions suspected to be great hammerheads, but identification is not 100% certain - I reworded the sentence

• "documented as moving closer to the poles in the summer" - is this both north & south poles?

• Yes - they follow warming water in the summer, which means northward in the northern hemisphere and southward in the southern hemisphere

Hope my notes are clear! —Mattisse (Talk) 22:33, 27 April 2009 (UTC)

Addressed comments; not sure whether you wanted me to change things for some of them or not. -- Yzx (talk) 23:13, 27 April 2009 (UTC)

• You have done a good job. —Mattisse (Talk) 23:30, 27 April 2009 (UTC)

Final GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): Clearly written b (MoS): Follows the main MoS elements

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): References are good b (citations to reliable sources): They are reliable c (OR): No OR

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): Covers major areas b (focused): Remains focused on the topic

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias: NPOV

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

• Congratulations! Good work.

—Mattisse (Talk) 23:30, 27 April 2009 (UTC)