Talk:Hot n Cold/GA1

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Reviewer: XXSNUGGUMSXX (talk) 20:29, 9 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Prose
Lead
  • In the opening paragraph, the "second studio and major mainstream debut album" bit should just read "second studio album". Even if Katy Hudson was commercially unsuccessful, that was certainly not minor to her career.
  •  Done
  • In the second paragraph, the "topped the charts in 15 countries" bit would read better as something like "topped charts in" and then list the countries were it topped charts.
  •  Done I've changed it to "topped the charts in Finland, Germany, Canada, Norway, Spain and Denmark, among others." I feel like listing all fifteen countries would probably be a bit long-winded for the opening.
  • Perfectly fine
  • In the third paragraph, "In order to promote" would read better as simply "To promote". Also, I would note the song's live debut in NBC's Today.
  •  Done
Background and composition
  • In the first paragraph, "According to Perry, 'Hot n Cold' was at one point under consideration to be released as Perry's debut mainstream single, but 'I Kissed a Girl' was ultimately chosen." would read better as something like "Perry said she once contemplated releasing 'Hot n Cold' as the first single with One of the Boys before 'I Kissed a Girl' was chosen".
  •  Done I've changed it to "Perry revealed that the song was originally considered for release as the album's first single, before "I Kissed a Girl" was chosen." — Hope that's OK.
  • Yes it is.
  • In the second paragraph, The "[[mood swings]]" redirect should just be [[mood swing]]s.
  •  Done
  • Per MOS:PUNCT and MOS:QUOTEMARKS, ′ should be ', and ″ should be ". There are several instances where this needs to be addressed in the chorus lyrics.
  •  Done I think I sorted this out yesterday, should be fixed now.
  • I noticed that, and you did indeed sort it out
Commercial performance
  • Be specific on "To date" when talking about sales (i.e. "As of April 2014") as "to date" is subject to change.
 Done
I just noticed that all the sources used there are outdated. Either find an updated source or take the time range back further (seems to be from September 2011).
Music video
  • Combine the two paragraphs or separate that first one out- there shouldn't be one massive paragraph followed by only a sentence or two.
  •  Done
  • Rather than saying "to date", give something like "As of April 2014" if including YouTube view count. Also, I'd update it as it has surpassed 149.9 million views.
  •  Done Also changed the figure to the combined view count by combining the views on that video with the pre-VEVO views shown in the video description.
Chart precession and succession
  • This section hardly contains anything and seems stray. I'd remove it altogether.
  •  Done
Sourcing
Music Video
  • Replace ref#27 (Hollywood Life) with a better source for Shannon Woodward's cameo as its reliability is questionable at best.
  • I can't find another source, so it's probably best to remove that sentence. I'll continue looking and see if I can find something that mentions it.
  • Fine with me
Usage in media
  • I replaced ref#28 with a better source (Capital FM) for when she mocked Sesame Street controversy on Saturday Night Live.
  • Thanks! :)
Tracklisting
  • The "European single", "Maxi single", "Rocket digital download single", "Rhapsody single", and "UK digital download" listings all need to be sourced.
  •  Done Removed a couple that I couldn't find sourced anywhere as I'm not sure about their reliability.
  • Good choice
There are also several dead references as indicated here.
 Done All dead refs should now be fixed.
Coverage
  • The "Critical reception" section could be expanded. Add another paragraph or two containing reviews from critics. I recommend including some that are not from album reviews of One of the Boys.
  • I've searched and can't find any other reviews, a lot of them have since been taken down or the websites have expired. I'll keep searching though.
  • Fine with me
  • Add some critics' reviews of the music video.
  •  Done Added the only one I could find, a review from Rolling Stone — I'll keep searching though.
  • Can you expand on the cover by "Woe, Is Me"?
  •  Done Also added section for the Baseballs version which charted
  • Good work!
Neutrality
  • No problems here
Stability
  • No problems here
GA Result
  • If the following is addressed within the next seven days, I will pass the GAN. XXSNUGGUMSXX (talk) 21:24, 9 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • Thanks a lot for your review! Everything should be cleared up now, so I hope the article can be promoted soon. S△M talk 17:41, 11 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • My pleasure. You just have one last point to address. XXSNUGGUMSXX (talk) 20:04, 11 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • Almost but not quite- for song sales indicating it is among her best-selling tracks, the sources are from September 2011. Either change the "As of April 2014" to "As of September 2011" or find more recent source(s) (from within the last several months) indicating it is one of her best selling singles. XXSNUGGUMSXX (talk) 00:14, 12 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • Changed the source to the one used earlier in the article, hopefully that's sorted now. S△M talk 02:02, 12 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • Excellent, thanks again for your help! S△M talk 16:46, 12 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]
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