Talk:Hum Aapke Dil Mein Rehte Hain/GA1

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Reviewer: SL93 (talk · contribs) 05:18, 15 January 2021 (UTC)

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• "Hum Aapke Dil Mein Rehte Hain (English: I Live in Your Heart) is a 1999 Indian Hindi-language romantic drama film directed by Satish Kaushik and produced by D. Ramanaidu for his banner Suresh Productions."

• I suggest changing "banner" to company or something similar. It isn't often that the word banner is used in this way.

Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:27, 15 January 2021 (UTC)

• "It starred" and "playing supporting roles".

• Starred should be changed to stars. Playing would better as "in supporting roles".

Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:27, 15 January 2021 (UTC)

• "The film telling the story"

• This should be "The film tells the story".

Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:27, 15 January 2021 (UTC)

• "served as a remake"

• Should be "serves as a remake". Better yet, it could "is a remake".

Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:27, 15 January 2021 (UTC)

• "and lyrics are penned by"

• "and the lyrics were written by"

Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:27, 15 January 2021 (UTC)

• "garnered well-response from audience"

• This sentence should be removed entirely per my next point below or it should be made clear that it's not from critics.

Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:27, 15 January 2021 (UTC)

• "The film received mixed-to-positive reviews"

• Are these reviews from critics?

Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:27, 15 January 2021 (UTC)

• "with mostly critical praise was directed"

• The word "was" is not needed.

Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:27, 15 January 2021 (UTC)

Plot section

• "The pampered Vijay has completed his education and now indulges in life's temptations to the extreme."

• How does he indulge in life's temptations to the extreme?

Removed --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 06:45, 15 January 2021 (UTC)

• "Megha is Vishwanath's personal assistant in his office. She is a hardworking girl struggling to support her family."

• Instead of two sentences, this can be combined into one sentence due to both of them focusing on the same character.

Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:48, 15 January 2021 (UTC)

• "Vishwanath asks Megha to quit her job and marry his son, but she refuses when she hears Vijay's strange condition."

• Why would she ask Megha to do that? What is the strange condition?

Changed --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 06:45, 15 January 2021 (UTC)

• "Vijay wants the marriage to be on a contract basis for a year and, if he does not fall in love with his wife in that duration, the marriage will be annulled."

• Why does Vijay want that?

Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 06:45, 15 January 2021 (UTC)

• "However, Megha's family is in dire financial straits and, so, she has to reconsider this offer."

• How will the marriage give wealth to Megha's family?

I think the sentence is clear now --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 08:07, 15 January 2021 (UTC)

• "In return for marrying Vijay, she asks for financial support for her family, which Vishwanath readily provides."

• Why did Vishwanath readily provide financial support?

I think the sentence is clear now --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 08:07, 15 January 2021 (UTC)

• "when he meets with an accident"

• This part sounds unusually phrased. What is the accident?

Changed, a car accident --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 07:59, 15 January 2021 (UTC)

• "At the end of the year, however, Vijay decides to annul the marriage, as had been agreed upon."

• Why did Vijay decide to do that? It seemed like a happy marriage from the sentence before it.

I think it's better now --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 08:15, 15 January 2021 (UTC)

• "After the separation, Vijay seems to be enjoying himself; but slowly and eventually, he starts to feel a longing for the presence of his devoted wife."

• Why does he feel that longing?

Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 08:16, 15 January 2021 (UTC)

• "Complications arise when Megha finds out that she is pregnant with Vijay's child."

• What complications?

It's already cleared... --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 08:27, 15 January 2021 (UTC)

• "People in her neighbourhood start to question her stay at her mother's house and the identity of the child's father."

• Why are they questioning those things?

That's a normal thing when a woman suddenly get pregnant, while she's not with her husband or doesn't have a husband. As we know that India has many norms. In my country, it also happened --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 08:27, 15 January 2021 (UTC)

• "In order to support herself, Megha gets a job in a new company"

• "starts a job"

Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:49, 15 January 2021 (UTC)

• "Vijay continues to pursue her and leaves no stone unturned to show her that he cares for her."

• What does he do to show her that?

Concise --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 08:40, 15 January 2021 (UTC)

• "Vishwanath and Vijay attend the ceremony as well and give her presents"

• It should be clarified as to who is receiving the presents.

• "An argument follows; Vijay and his father walk out, followed by all the guests."

• What is the argument about?

Removed, as this part is unimportant. --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 08:42, 15 January 2021 (UTC)

• "Near the completion of her pregnancy, Megha learns that troublemakers Khairati Lal and Yeshwant Kumar, who had once attempted to kill Vijay, have escaped from prison."

• This plot point seems to have came from out of nowhere.

Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 08:43, 15 January 2021 (UTC)

• "On the way, she learns that the whole thing was a set-up by Vijay's friends to lure her back to her husband."

• Why did her friends want to lure her back to her husband?

• "As soon as she meets him, she accuses him of this shameless act."

• What shameless act?

• "Vijay then staggers towards her, with his stomach pierced by a piece of glass and blood pouring from the wound. It turns out that Khairati and Yeshwant have attacked him in reality."

• I'm confused. There is no transition anywhere from the last plot point to the stabbing happening. Why add "in reality"? I didn't think that the film was based in a virtual world or something.

I'll rewatch the film, so i can match the plot section; i watched it a few months ago, i'm so sorry... --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:35, 15 January 2021 (UTC)

SL93 I think the plot section is clear now, you can review it now :) --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 13:43, 15 January 2021 (UTC)

Production section

• "was remade from"

• "is a remake of"

Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:36, 15 January 2021 (UTC)

• "and marking"

• "and it marks"

Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:36, 15 January 2021 (UTC)

• "comeback to"

• "return to" sounds better

Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:36, 15 January 2021 (UTC)

• "Meanwhile, Kajol who almost twenty years younger than him was cast as the film's protagonist"

• I don't see how it is relevant how much younger she is.

Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:36, 15 January 2021 (UTC)

• "was done"

• This part doesn't sound encyclopedic. A different word other than done should be used.

Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:36, 15 January 2021 (UTC)

• "Some songs were shot"

• I think you mean "Some songs were recorded"

Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:36, 15 January 2021 (UTC)

Release section

• Produced under the Suresh Productions banner"

• It seems like the word banner can be removed. Maybe change it to "Produced by Suresh Productions"

Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:37, 15 January 2021 (UTC)

• "According to review aggregator website Rotten Tomatoes, it was available for streaming on Prime Video since May 2019."

• This would be better as "It was available for streaming on Prime Video since May 2019" due to it not being a controversial statement.

Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:37, 15 January 2021 (UTC)

References

• How are Planet Bollywood and Bollywood Hungama reliable sources?

Aitraaz, which is a featured article, uses a source from Planet Bollywood. Bollywood Hungama is a big and famous entertainment portal, and has established in 1999. Many articles like Kareena Kapoor, Preity Zinta and Shah Rukh Khan use it. --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:39, 15 January 2021 (UTC)

Awesome. You can consider this part as completed. SL93 (talk) 05:40, 15 January 2021 (UTC)

Everything matches the references and this should be good to go after these issues are resolved. SL93 (talk) 05:20, 15 January 2021 (UTC)

Nicholas Michael Halim Will 7 days give you enough time to watch the film? SL93 (talk) 05:42, 15 January 2021 (UTC)

Yeah... --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:46, 15 January 2021 (UTC)

I made some minor edits and this is approved for GA now. SL93 (talk) 13:56, 15 January 2021 (UTC)

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