Talk:Jack Bros./GA1

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Reviewer: TarkusAB (talk · contribs) 03:29, 19 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Ah yes, one of the rarest VB games. Looks interesting, will get to this one later tonight or tomorrow.

Lead

released in September 1995 in Japan and in October or November 1995 in North America - The use or "or" here sounds weak and unsure. You could just say "released in fall 1995 in Japan and US." We don't know the exact US release dates and it's possible there never was a solidified exact date like every game in modern times.

I dislike using terms like "fall" - even when it's specifically about the US and therefore obviously means near the end of the year, a reader from Australia or NZ might instinctively think of the beginning of the year - so I just combined them into "in late 2015" for both regions in the lead

Consider adding credits to the infobox. They are available on moby games

Moby Games isn't a reliable source, so I can't use that.

Add "|image has rationale=yes" tag to licensing section for image file

Well, that message specifically says it's for admins and patrollers when they confirm that it has a rationale. I'm neither.

Gameplay and premise

or get stuck in traps - "or falling into traps"

Done

Reduce non-free image size so width x height is less than 100,000 pixels

Done

Reception

Jack Bros. was well received, with multiple critics calling it one of the best Virtual Boy games; some thought that it was held back by the platform, and that it should be made available on other platforms, such as the Nintendo 3DS. - When I began reading this sentence, I thought this was reception at the time of release, but then the 3DS is mentioned. Make it clear that this is in retrospect, like "Jack Bros. has been well received in retrospective reviews, with multiple critics..."

Done

In 2003, Tips & Tricks said that it is the American Virtual Boy release that is the most difficult to find a copy of - "In 2003, the staff at Tips & Tricks stated it to be the most uncommon North American Virtual Boy release" Use "staff" or author's name

Done

role-playing elements - link role-playing to Role-playing video game

Done

Do a ctrl+f on the word "that"...for most of these instances in this section, "that" is word fluff and can be removed

Done

I'll put this on hold and once issues are addressed I'll take another look. TarkusAB 05:13, 19 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@TarkusAB: I have addressed everything above.--IDV^talk 14:51, 19 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@IDV: Looks good. There are some let's plays on youtube that have credits at end but only problem is staff first names are initialized. Not sure if that helps. Either way this passes! TarkusAB 17:10, 19 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]