Talk:Janice Rand/GA1
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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 22:42, 27 September 2016 (UTC)
I always enjoy reading about fictional characters so I will definitely take this one. Will have my comments up by the end of the week at the latest. Aoba47 (talk) 22:42, 27 September 2016 (UTC)
- Add an ALT text for the infobox image.
- In this sentence from the lead (Part way though the first season, Whitney was released), add the phrase “from her contract” or a similar idea to the end to complete the sentence.
- Who is the “they” in the following phrase (The official explanation was that they…)? Is network executives, the show’s producers/crew, etc.? If the identity of “they” is unknown or unclear, I would revise this to say “The official explanation for Whitney’s removal was to free up…”
- You use release a lot in the second paragraph of the lead, I would suggest adding more variety there.
- Add an ALT text for the image of Shatner. Make sure all images have ALT texts.
@Miyagawa: Great job with the article as always. It was a very informative and interesting read. Once my comments are addressed, this should be an easy pass. I could not find much that need improvement so that is the reason why the review is short. Aoba47 (talk) 23:09, 27 September 2016 (UTC)
- @Aoba47: I've added the Alts where I could - unfortunatly the Star Trek character infobox doesn't have it as an option and I'm not familiar enough with the template to know how to add it in. I've added the "they" and swapped out the majority of the releases. Miyagawa (talk) 10:36, 29 September 2016 (UTC)