Talk:Japanese battleship Haruna/GA1
GA Review[edit]
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- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose): b (MoS):
What is the relevance of the future ranks of Haruna's commanding officers in this article? In my eyes, all they accomplish is a disruption of the prose.
It's not clear when the invasion of Manchuria took place from the text. Was it 17 months after singing the London Treaty, or 17 months after 1937, the date that immediately precedes the sentence? In a broader sense, is the Manchuria invasion relevant in this paragraph? It doesn't seem to flow logically here.
Did the ship participate in the Singapore operation mentioned in the "Prewar section"? The article jumps to early 1942 without mentioning Singapore again.
The sentence beginning On 28 October 1935, Captain (later Vice Admiral) Jisaburo Ozawa assumed… makes sound like Ozawa rather than Haruna was assigned to the Third Battleship Division. Similar situation with the sentence farther down beginning On 25 January 1944, Captain (later Rear-Admiral) Kazu Shigenaga assumed…. I'm assuming Shigenaga took command when the ship was at Kure?
The section title "1943: Inactivity" doesn't seem to be completely accurate. After all the ship did do stuff, even if it ended up being inconsequential.
Peacock-ish phrase: elite veteran Japanese fighter instructors. Either reword or attribute/cite more closely.
- a (prose): b (MoS):
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
The phrase which were even or superior in performance to the F6F Hellcat should have an in-text attribution and/or a citation immediately following to substantiate the claim.
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars etc.:
- No edit wars etc.:
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
The images File:Haruna on trials.jpg and File:Haruna at sea.jpg indicate PD in Japan, but do not include a publication date to establish whether or not PD in the US (as noted in the tag on the file page).
- Also, the full size version of File:Haruna at sea.jpg is available.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Other article comments and/or questions
- I'm wondering about the Kobe/Kôbe/Kōbe spelling. Since the WP article is at Kobe (with no diacritic), it seems like that ought to be the spelling used, but, when spelled with a diacritic, isn't it usually Kōbe" (macron) rather than "Kôbe" (circumflex)?
- Why no link to Sasebo in the lead?
- Links to Maya, Hiryu, and Soryu would be of high value.
- If possible, it would be nice to stagger image placement on left and right, per recommendations at MOS:IMAGE.
Most of the items should be easily resolved. After they are addressed, I see nothing that would prevent this from passing. — Bellhalla (talk) 05:45, 16 February 2009 (UTC)