Talk:Las de la Intuición/GA1

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GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 22:02, 11 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Grabbing this for a review. This is one of my favorite Shakira's songs so I look forward to learning more about it. Aoba47 (talk) 22:02, 11 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you so much for this! I'm just wondering now which version is one of your favorite Shakira's songs, haha.

Regards, --Paparazzzi (talk) 05:27, 12 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Of course! I honestly did not know there was an English version of this song until I started reading the article. I randomly ran across the music video when I was taking Spanish classes in high school and college. It is definitely one of my favorite Shakira music videos, and I like the style of music. I have been thinking about picking up Spanish again, but I will just need to fit in time-wise. Aoba47 (talk) 20:16, 12 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Lead and infobox

For this sentence ("Las de la Intuición" has been described as a synthpop and euro house track whose lyrics talk about female intuition.), please clarify who was doing the describing. Or you could just say that it is that type of track, with the “has been described as” phrase.

Background and composition

Please link “Shakira” on the first use in the body of the article.
For this part (Regarding her decision to work inn isolation), I think you mean “in” rather than “inn”.

Critical reception

I would add the year that “New Year’s Day” was released.
I wold move the sentence about the nomination from the second paragraph (which is mostly about negative reviews) to the first paragraph (which is mostly about positive ones).

Chart performance

Everything looks good here.

Music video

I would revise this sentence (The outfits made the video to be considered one of the singer's sexiest clips by some critics) to (Some critics considered the video one of the singer’s sexiest clips due to the outfits.).
Unlink “Shakira” here.
Avoid the repetition of “music video” in this sentence (Music critics gave the music video a positive response, with many of them deeming it as one of Shakira's sexiest music videos because of her outfits.).

Live performances

I would move the last two sentences of the first paragraph to the beginning of the second paragraph to keep all of the information about the tour performances together.

Cover versions and compilations

Everything looks good here.

Final comments

Great work with the article. Once my comments are addressed, I will be more than happy to pass this. Hope you have a great start to your weekend! Aoba47 (talk) 21:56, 12 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- Hi! Thank you so much for the review I have addressed all of your comments. By the way, I'm glad that you like the Spanish version, it's way better than the one in English, haha. Regards, and have a nice day! --Paparazzzi (talk) 22:14, 12 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  - Thank you for addressing everything! I just listened to the English version, and it was not too bad, though the original Spanish original is a lot better. I will ✓ Pass this. Aoba47 (talk) 22:55, 12 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]

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