Talk:Let Me Sleep Beside You/GA1
GA Review[edit]
GA toolbox |
---|
Reviewing |
Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch
Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 19:31, 15 February 2022 (UTC)
Good Article review progress box
|
I'm back from my few days away, so now's the time to start a new review! --K. Peake 19:31, 15 February 2022 (UTC)
Infobox and lead[edit]
- Infobox looks good!
- The release info should come between the recording and departure sentences
- It's acceptable to have it this way (see Aftermath (Rolling Stones album) or even David Bowie (1969 album) which you reviewed). Plus, I find it flows better stating why it appeared on a compilation album first – zmbro (talk) (cont) 03:07, 22 February 2022 (UTC)
- Pipe singles to Single (music)
- ""Let Me Sleep Beside You" displays a" → "the song displays a"
- Both done
- A celli arrangement is sourced in the body, not strings
- "The track was rejected by Deram" → "The song was rejected by Deram"
- Done
- Pipe compilation to Compilation album
- That'd be WP:SEAOFBLUE though – zmbro (talk) (cont) 03:07, 22 February 2022 (UTC)
- "has seen release on compilations and reissues." → "has seen release on numerous albums." because it has been released on more than one of both
- Done
- "The song was also featured" → "A remixed version of the song was featured"
- The publications part should be the second sentence of the second para instead, also add ones included
- "entire Toy album as part" → "entire Toy album, as part"
- Done
- "The remake was positively received." add why it is praised
Background and recording[edit]
- Img looks good!
- Add the release year of his self-titled debut album
- Pipe singles to Single (music)
- "turned it down but suggested" → "turned an offer down, but suggested"
- Remove pipe on single since this should have been done earlier in the para
- Above four done
- Use something other than for to start the second sentence of the second para, to be less repetitive
- Pipe B-side to A-side and B-side
- Done
Composition[edit]
- Retitle to Composition and lyrics
- Done
- The celli wikilink leads to a disambiguation page; fix this if it is kept, which I'm not sure of since the lead says strings?
- Pipe chord to Chord (music)
- "such as "Let Me Sleep Beside You" and "Be My Wife"" → "such as 'Let Me Sleep Beside You' and 'Be My Wife'"
- Both done
Release and aftermath[edit]
- Any context for the quote?
- "they requested he change" → "they requested that Bowie change"
- Done
- "The Stones, also a Decca artist," → "The Rolling Stones, also under Decca," since calling a band an artist makes no sense
- Pipe compilation to Compilation album
- WP:SEAOFBLUE again? – zmbro (talk) (cont) 03:07, 22 February 2022 (UTC)
- I can't see the source, so I'm asking is it correct to state BBC sessions here when only one is specified or does the source say there was multiple ones?
- Fixed
- "and argues that it" → "and arguing that it"
- "and impersonating Mick Jagger." → "and impersonating Jagger."
- "cut of the film but was" → "cut of the film, but was"
- "a more folk-inspired version of the track with" → "a more folk-inspired number with" to be less wordy
- "called it superior to Bowie's entire debut album and acknowledged its sound" → "called the song superior to Bowie's entire debut album and acknowledged the sound"
- Above five done
Toy version[edit]
- Replace hlist with bullet points per Template:Infobox song
- Sure
- "along with other tracks Bowie wrote" → "along with other tracks he wrote"
- Wikilink EMI
- Both done
Personnel[edit]
- Good
Notes[edit]
- What warrants the inclusion of note b when that album is not mentioned in the article?
References[edit]
- Copyvio score looks incredible at 14.5%!!!
- Pipe Consequence of Sound to Consequence (publication) on ref 16
- Done
- Wikilink Rolling Stone on ref 20
- Done
- MOS:CAPS issues with ref 29, unless that is how Toy can be stylized
Sources[edit]
- Good
External links[edit]
- Good
Final comments and verdict[edit]
- On hold until all of the issues are fixed; smooth article so far! --K. Peake 09:50, 16 February 2022 (UTC)