Talk:Lights and Sounds (song)/GA1

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GA Review[edit]

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GA review (see here for criteria)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:
  • "The song's lyrics are based on the band's pressures on coping with the success that they were enduring when writing songs for their second album." — Remove "that" betweeen "success" and "they" and remove "pressures on", as it sounds redundant.
    • Done.
  • "The song, itself, won the 2006 Spike Video Game Award..." — "itself" is unnecessary as it's obvious we're referring to the song
    • Done.
  • "...it was a relief"." — Move the quotation mark after the period.
    • Not according to this.
      • I knew about that. AFAIK when a period should go inside the quote (end of a quoted sentence) and outside the quote (end of the main sentence), the one inside is written. However, I can't find a MOS rule about it, so I'm going to pass this. Admiral Norton (talk) 23:47, 13 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Longineu Parsons' plays a nonstop drumming rhythm..." — Why is there an apostrophe after Parsons' last name?
    • I'm pretty sure its supposed to be there, but I've removed it.
  • "Afterward, the song spent 11 weeks on the chart, before retiring of April 19, 2006." — Remove "2006".
    • Done.
  • Per WP:LQ, Greenwald's and Beaujour's quotes should have the period inside the quotation marks.
    • Done.
  • "...but when it came time to start production for the music video, it was..." — Change to "...when the time came to start production, it was..."
    • Done.
  • "Then it is followed with a slow motion sequence, as it shows the band continuing the song, still in a fast pace." — Change to "As the video shows the band continuing the song still at a fast pace, the effect is followed by a slow motion sequence."
    • Done.
  • Per MOS:SLASH, use spaced slashes (" / ") instead of unspaced ones ("/") when quoting the lyrics. Also, do not separate lyrics in sentences by commas or colons, treat them as ordinary quotes.
    • Done.
  • It would be useful to direct the Yellowcard Wiki link to the specific entry about the song. Admiral Norton (talk) 22:44, 13 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
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