Talk:Maggie Gyllenhaal/GA1
GA Review[edit]
- Lead
- The lead ought to be merged into probably just two paragraphs per WP:LEAD. It's currently four, with the first paragraph just one sentence.
- Early life
- You probably ought to mention her brother in this section. Especially since he is mentioned in the first lines of her career.
- Career
- "antifeminist" Should this by hyphenated?
"Although impressed with the script, Gyllenhaal initially had some qualms about doing the film, which she believed could deliver an antifeminist message. But after carefully discussing the script with the film's director, Steven Shainberg, she agreed to join the project." This needs referencing.Struck out comment, have undone an edit by an IP. Hopefully okay now?- It won't affect whether a GA pass/fail, but I think this section needs either a copyedit or some tinkering to the format. It isn't clear whether it's in chronological order or arranged by genre, e.g. film, theatre, modelling, etc.
- Personal life
- "Sarsgaard is close friends with her brother Jake." I think her should be changed to Gyllenhaal.
- "Trickle Up.org" Is this right with a space? If it's a web address, I would expect it to be one word.
I presume there are no more images available? Peanut4 (talk) 13:04, 19 July 2008 (UTC)
- Final review
- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose): b (MoS):
- a (prose): b (MoS):
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars etc.:
- No edit wars etc.:
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Everything looks good now and a sound basis for expansion and a possible future FAC bid. Good work. Peanut4 (talk) 18:36, 21 July 2008 (UTC)