Talk:Mystery Train (film)/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Casliber (talk · contribs) 00:49, 24 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Righty-ho, I am reading through now and am making straightforward changes as I go. Please revert any where I inadvertently change the meaning. Queries below. Also, don't automatically do what I suggest - if you think otherwise please say so and we can discuss. I guess you forgot the GAN template. Anyway, I couldn't resist not reviewing a Jarmusch fim :))) Casliber (talk · contribs) 00:49, 24 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

~~Lead's a wee bit short.~~ Casliber (talk · contribs) 00:52, 24 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

~~"Italian episodic films" and "Japanese cinema of ghost stories"~~ - I don't think these need to be in quotations as they are nouns not clauses.

~~If possible, it'd be great to expand the Production section - e.g. teh choice of Strummer - I recall some discussion at the time about his enthusiasm for the role etc.~~

even to the extent of proclaiming him to be... - comes across as a little wordy..is anything lost by writing "even proclaiming him to be..."

Might have appeared at Sydney film festival too, I'll check.

Stills from the film as well as on-location shots of the actors and the film crew were collected by photographer Masayoshi Sukita and published to accompany the film as Mystery Train: A Film by Jim Jarmusch ~~- as individual photos, an album, or illustrated book? unclear...~~

~~did not joke around on set stayed with the veteran actors between shots~~ - the flow is funny here, needs a conjunction or verb tweak or something

It would be great to find any later interviews with Jarmusch to see how he felt about the film retrospectively. Though this can only happen with sources....Casliber (talk · contribs) 10:55, 25 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Yo Casliber, thanks for the review! I must admit guilt in nominating this before I had finished its GA development so that it would move up the queue at GAN faster, but happily you've jumped the line. I've expanded the production section quite a bit, but haven't come across much discussion of Strummer. I agree that it would be great to have a retrospective Jarmusch perspective on the film, but my Google-fu is finding only noise. I'll dig a little deeper on that, and also overhaul the lede today. Skomorokh 11:37, 29 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Don't sweat it, it is summer here and I'll take this at a pace akin to Tom Waits in Down By Law..relaxed and mellow. I'll give you some time to ferret some stuff out if'n you want :) Casliber (talk · contribs) 10:59, 30 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

No worries, I appreciate it. I did a comprehensive sweep of Google News when researching the Jarmusch article here, and the only later comment I could find was in this 1999 interview with The Guardian in which he rehashes already-known statements about the influences on the script. I've also gone through Jarmusch scholar Ludvig Hertzberg's collection of Jarmusch interviews and website and found little explicit reaction from Jarmusch to the work. I know that he claims not to watch his films after he has finished making them, and subscribes to a your-interpretation-is-as-valid-as-mine theory of film criticism, so that could be at the root of it. So I wouldn't hold my breath for finding much on this point as far as the GA review is concerned, but whatever I do come across I'll definitely stick in. I haven't come across mention of Sydney in the film festival refs either, fwiw. Cheers, Skomorokh 14:17, 30 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

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