Talk:National Register of Electors/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 14:31, 30 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this article shortly. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 14:31, 30 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Here are the issues I found:

There are a couple deadlinks that need to be fixed: see here.
"minimizing participation inequality which typically affects "the kinds of individuals, such as the young, the poor and those with little formal education"[3] who tend to not take the initiative to participate in electoral and related events." I see what you're saying, but when reading the sentence out loud it sounds odd. Reword, ideally putting the quote in your own words since that may be was causing the jarring text.
"which has relied on a permanent register for a long time." had relied would be better here
"The Elections Act as amended by Bill C-2 granted Royal Assent on 31 May 2000 contains" contained. Since this is something that has been in effect for a while, there should be no tense issues in the article; a tense check for any present-tense sentences I missed would be beneficial, though I think there were just those couple.
"Targeted revision involves sending pairs of "revising agents" to certain areas such as new residential developments, areas known for high population mobility, student residences, nursing homes and chronic care facilities." citation preferred for this.
I'm not convinced of the usefulness of the Provincial voter lists section. Having the comparisons between the two is fine, but specifics about the provincial lists should be in those articles rather than this one.
A couple references are in all caps. That is discouraged even if that's how they are written in the ref itself, so fix those.

I'll put the article on hold for a week and will pass when the issues are fixed. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 01:28, 5 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I've made several changes, merging duplicate refs, de-capitalising ref titles, fixing tense issues, and other minor tweaks. Only one of the links reported as broken is actually broken, all the rest are OK. (I'm not sure why the automated tools are reporting that registration is required, as I can access them with no registration and cookies blocked.) The only dead link of concern is the ref titled "Institution-Specific Classes of Records", which seems to have no remaining trace on the internet. (Google has a cached, HTML-ified copy of the RTF version of that document. See this.) The original source is currently purging all 2009 documents in that class and replacing them with 2010 documents. Mind matrix 21:57, 6 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

The changes look good. Once that one sentence is reworded i'll pass. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 00:05, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I went and fixed that, so this now passes as a GA. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 15:26, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

OK, thanks for that - I've tweaked it slightly by inverting the position of 'who' and 'that'. Mind matrix 18:05, 9 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]